She was perfect

She was perfect

1 chapter / 498 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

Its a short story about a schizophrenic teenage girl named Annalynn.
Its just a story...but perhaps true for many kids around the world.

Cover by copperfalcon!

Genres:

Writing, Short Story

Comments(14)

Marcy

3 months ago Ané said:

I know I'm repeating myself, but this is so beautiful! The emotions are honest and raw, I feel so much for the character, it hurts. You gave me a glimpse of what it's like to have Schizophrenia, you capture the loneliness of it perfectly. This shows a side that people don't normally see, people tend to think it's just hearing voices and seeing things, but there's more to it than that. It's such a complex condition, which I want to understand, and I want to do research on it when I get accepted for a masters degree.

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4 months ago Harley Quinn said:

Wow. This book really does. . . 'tug on your heartstrings' as my English teacher would say. I hope you continue it. It's a great book, even if it is sad

Capture

5 months ago Jazzy said:

This hit me right in the feels....I've no experience with schizophrenia but I'd stay regardless you did an awesome job with this.

Compassionate124

5 months ago Ritu said:

Wow it was a really nice story. I don't really have much of an experience in the mental illness you mentioned but I think the description is pretty awesome. Loved it. Have a great day. Bye!!!

Reviews(9)

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4 months ago Artemis J. Potter said:

I really like the emotion in this piece. It is very palpable. I feel like this piece could be longer. Like a few others have said, I feel like you could show us more of how bad Annalynn's life was with schizophrenia instead of telling. It is already emotional, but I feel like more showing would make it more emotional. Also, I think this could be more effective if it was told from Annalynn's point of view, to really see her internal struggle. Overall, I enjoyed this!

Another girl

4 months ago -love-monae- said:

Hey Auroni, I can tell you're a good writer and that fact that you did a mental illness makes it even more fascinating. Also, this story touched my heart because my uncle is schizophrenic, so keep up the good work! I'll be looking forward to more of "She was Perfect."