The Artisan's Pages

The Artisan's Pages

10 chapters / 18757 words

Approximately about 2 hours to read

Description:

What is it like to be Deaf? The only answer Mereda could give was: Normal. To her, it was completely normal. That was until she met Luciel. Everyone knows good impressions matter, but Luciel couldn't have made a bigger impression than stealing her book and dropping her off right in the 1300's before the Black Plague struck Europe. Now narrowly dancing through time and space after a book thief, Mereda will learn what normal truly means. And that normal means safety, with nothing hunting you.

Genres:

Writing, Fantasy, Romance

Comments(10)

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7 months ago Nessa Hansen said:

Yes I would like to swap and I'd love it if you read whatever story you'd like. Now on to read your story!!

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8 months ago J.A. [Post-Figgy Idol Hiatus] said:

I was tempted to click all the available emotions, because I feel rather emotional after reading just the first chapter. You did a stellar job with this. The writing style is perfect, your character is flawless (from a writing perspective) and... this is the sort of book I would buy from a bookstore.

I cannot wait to read more. I'm absolutely up for a swap. I don't have any writing in this style currently on Figment, but if fantasy/scifi doesn't bother you, then I would love for you to take a look at any of mine that appeal to you.

Thanks for offering the swap, and so sorry it took me a while to get back to you.

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8 months ago James MacKnight said:

Yeah, I'm definitely up for a swap. I read the first few chapters of The Artisan's Pages and I loved it. It's very stylish writing that demonstrates real talent. I think the character development is excellent and I love the idea of having the main protagonist deaf. It's a very engrossing story.

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8 months ago Rissawrites said:

Also, I meant to mention when I commented earlier, you should look into joining my group, "the Creative Crew".

Reviews(2)

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8 months ago MaryAnn said:

Ok. Let's get started. You asked me for a review, so I'm gonna give you one.

For starters, you are an author that can describe a scene beautifully. You have a way with words, as some may say. I love your first chapter. There are a few things that I would like to mention that you COULD tweak. I'm not saying you have to, but you COULD....that's the thing about writing. You can bend and break as many rules as you want and still be an amazing author.

When you write a disclaimer...or whatever you did in the first (or second...I can't remember) chapter, I didn't quite get it. Where you explained how you would be creating the dialogue, I feel you should either leave that out completely or add it in the beginning. People will eventually catch on to what you are doing, you are just explaining how you are doing your dialogue. I caught on quickly, and I'm sure others will, too.

You present your main character beautifully. You slowly bring her into view, into focus, so that we can see who she really is. However, I would like to know more about her brother (or whoever you mentioned in the very first part, before the first chapter.) I wasn't quite sure what you were talking about.

Another thing that you could fix are the grammatical and punctual errors. There are a few things that threw me off...until I realized it was a typo. Don't worry...people are always pointing those things out to me when I publish a piece.

Other than that I don't really have anything to say. You are a wonderful writer who has amazing ideas.

If you would like, you could check out my book about a deaf girl. It's called "UNTITLED"...mostly because I don't have a title for it yet ;)

Anyways, I'm really looking forward to reading and reviewing more of your pieces. You are such an amazing writer!

Keep up the amazing work and write on!!! All the best, ~MaryAnn

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8 months ago Rissawrites said:

Just so you are aware of how I do my reviews: I do my reviews by chapter, and make notes as I read. The easiest way that I have found to convey small errors that I find is by quoting the sentence where the mistake is and putting the correction in brackets[].

Chapter 1-

Your opening scene is so beautifully written, I'm awed at the talent and already engrossed in the story. Very nice!

"In the corner[,] the street that..." "A child that had on[c]e been crying" "Staring at the floor in it[s] complete[ly] polished glory" "Heading to the entrance[,] but were stopped..." "Before Mereda could say goodbye[,] the Director..." "She couldn't expect everyone she meet[*met] to understand..." "...Which suddenly seemed to protrude in the dress[']s tight form..."

I am aware that it may seem like I'm giving you a lot of criticism but really, they are all really small grammatical/punctual errors. The writing itself is very good.

I feel that you do a very good job explaining things from the point of view of someone who is deaf, and the little comments you add in between writing will deem helpful for people who aren't familiar with the ways of the deaf community. One of my closest friends is deaf, although she does have a cochlear implant, so I have a relative understanding of most of the details pertaining to the deaf community. But for someone who isn't in the know, they are sure to learn a little from just reading your story.

I can honestly say that I really like what I have read so far. You have a lot of talent, especially when it comes to writing descriptions. I think you'd probably do really well with writing poetry too. Expect some more reviews from me because I intend to continue to read your story. Happy writing! :)