C.o.t.F.S.: The Rise of Corpsefire

C.o.t.F.S.: The Rise of Corpsefire

20 chapters / 31093 words

Approximately about 3 hours to read

Description:

This is a work in progress!
In the midst of great war between two sides of four different nations, an old enemy arises to destroy them all.
Thrown from the lives they once knew, a group of rebels from all four of the warring kingdoms must make peace with one another to defeat their common enemy. Blood will be spilled and friends will fall. Will they all survive against the onslaught of the Corpsefire?
Chronicles of the Fantasy Squadron Book 1

Genres:

Adventure, Fantasy, Novel

Comments(1)

Avaminn f'nett 2

5 months ago Dawn Kearns said:

I like your new cover!

Reviews(20)

Avaminn f'nett 2

about 1 month ago Dawn Kearns said:

Chapter 18

At long last, Sara awakens! It's been so long, that I've forgot what country she's from. Oops. Warsgale, I think?

"With his head." Whose head?

Yep, I was right, Warsgale. How does the Commandant even know who she is, though?

I don't think I've seen Gaura and his awesome cloak for a while either.

Pitha's going to be that character who's drinking in every scene, I presume. Kind of like Lenaine.

And Kyra hasn't been around for a while either. I'm glad to see you're bringing back the characters that haven't been around lately.

This was a good chapter. There were a few sentences throughout that could have been worded better, but I mostly was just glad to finally see Sara again.

Avaminn f'nett 2

2 months ago Dawn Kearns said:

Chapter 17

"I left the room" - Since you're writing in present tense, this should be "I leave the room."

"Anyway, as soon as I'm done changing" - I would delete "anyway"

Riley's being friendly to this girl, and then has to control herself to not punch her? She didn't do anything particularly upsetting that would even cause an easily-angered person to want to punch her. Riley's thought process here is quite confusing. Why is she being friendly in the first place when clearly she doesn't like this girl? The only reason I can think of is to try to get information, but Riley doesn't seem to have that intention.

In a battle setting, I have no idea what Love magic would even be used for. I'm not even sure what Love magic even does yet, but I guess I'll find out.

I like Pitha so far. She's pretty weird and her change of character was super odd. She's someone I definitely want to see more of.