12 chapters / 1059 words

Approximately 5 minutes to read


she held the moon in her hands, but all he saw was darkness.

**everything's lowercase for a reason! and I know I have grammar mistakes, but my poetry is mainly about the content/feelings vs. the grammar!**



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6 months ago C. Van Asch (Chesster) said:

(Note in my reviews I try to be encouraging as possible.)

Grammar Mistakes:

None that I could see.

First Sentence:

It works.

Book Name:

I'm guessing moonlight is a different one of the poems? I like it how the name of the book is simple and easy to say.


No repetitive lines.


Okay, word choices.

Overall Score (time) (1-10):


This is a sad poem about romance. It's also a poem I couldn't connect to because I'm not a big fan of romance, yes it did have a sad ending, which actually made it sound like it is based on a true story/experience which is cool. The first sentence is so, so then again this is a poem so probably don't have to change it. Grammar mistakes none that I could see.


10 months ago Eden said:

I read all of the poems and enjoyed all of them. My favorite ones were the first and last poems. I loved the transition from each poem, as if they are all stages of love and life. The flow of all the poems was good. I didn't see any grammar mistakes or anything. I think you did a really good job at telling the story behind the poem.