All of My Broken Pieces

All of My Broken Pieces

37 chapters / 1275 words

Approximately 6 minutes to read

Description:

A collection of my pieces, the ones that have been stolen, the one that have been left behind, and the ones that have been put back together; all broken in their own way.

Genres:

Writing, Poetry

Comments(35)

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3 months ago Christine Hungerford said:

Wow! I really like the writing technique (the way the words flow together to make a beautifully crafted poem)! I only read some, but most of them were great!

I believe you could have given a little more description on the first 6 (the ones I read). Just make sure the audience knows that you're talking about the word at the bottom. If you think that the poem explains Silence or Gasping, that is fine. Don't think you have to change. Just my opinion.

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4 months ago Jacklyn said:

Hi! I'd like to say these poems are simply amazing and deep. It's wonderful to see poems like yours, which make you think and ponder. Overall, I'd say the raw emotion and the fluidity makes your poem very nice to read. :)

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4 months ago Hannah Grace said:

These poems are all so deep. Simple illustrations, but deep meanings. I especially like Glass Bowls are like People, because I've never thought of it that way but it makes complete sense! All in all, amazing job. The poems make me think about my own experiences as well as wonder what inspired them. Great job!

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4 months ago Megannah Eyre said:

This book of poetry is phenomenal. I'm sorry I haven't been able to look at it for some time. Just trying to piece all of my broken pieces together. Hahah. No pun intended. Lovely work.

Reviews(27)

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3 months ago Christine Hungerford said:

I really believe you have a talent for poetry, Meg! I think you should show everyone you know, those on Figment as well as in your own life. I don't doubt they would enjoy your poems!

Thanks for sharing:)

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5 months ago Isabel S. said:

Echoing the review before me, I have to say that this is very beautiful. I love how all of the individual poems are also strung together to tell one long story. Nicely done.

I have a few comments, but they're pretty minor. You forgot to capitalize "how" in Ch. 17, and "to" in Ch. 30. Also, I can't help but wonder if there's a better word to use than "scower" in Ch. 22. Scower (or scour) means "to clean or brighten the surface of (something) by rubbing it hard, typically with an abrasive or detergent". While I can obviously see how you're not using a scrub brush here, I don't think the guy is "cleaning or brightening" here.

Again, another word that might be used wrong: "devoutly" in Ch. 23. Devout means "totally committed to a cause or belief". It doesn't make sense for someone to "devoutly shatter them" as you said. Maybe you could find another word?

Again, great job! These poems are amazing! Keep it up!