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A collection of my pieces, the ones that have been stolen, the one that have been left behind, and the ones that have been put back together; all broken in their own way.
about 1 month ago Jacklyn said:
Hi! I'd like to say these poems are simply amazing and deep. It's wonderful to see poems like yours, which make you think and ponder. Overall, I'd say the raw emotion and the fluidity makes your poem very nice to read. :)
about 1 month ago Hannah Grace said:
These poems are all so deep. Simple illustrations, but deep meanings. I especially like Glass Bowls are like People, because I've never thought of it that way but it makes complete sense! All in all, amazing job. The poems make me think about my own experiences as well as wonder what inspired them. Great job!
about 1 month ago Megannah Eyre said:
This book of poetry is phenomenal. I'm sorry I haven't been able to look at it for some time. Just trying to piece all of my broken pieces together. Hahah. No pun intended. Lovely work.
about 1 month ago Anndrea Davis said:
these poems are beautiful pieces of work. They show so much emotion and I love how they begin where you are talking about being sort of broken, but by the end you are gathering your pieces. This is wonderful!
5 days ago G. Francis said:
NOTE: I give constructive feedback based on my opinion and past experience as a writer. I don't expect you to take all or any of my advice if it doesn't suit your preferences.
I genuinely love this. Very unique way to execute multiple poems and create one masterpiece. I can clearly see how they're all connected and it's clear that this is all coming from one person rather than multiple styles jumbled together.
These poems all had a wonderful flow to them and you managed to transition from each one fluidly. The formatting of each one also fit the message you were trying to send. (especially Hit & Run)
Overall, great pieces! I absolutely love your writing style and this book as a whole is one magnificent work of art. Nice job and keep it up!
- G. Francis
about 1 month ago Isabel S. said:
Echoing the review before me, I have to say that this is very beautiful. I love how all of the individual poems are also strung together to tell one long story. Nicely done.
I have a few comments, but they're pretty minor. You forgot to capitalize "how" in Ch. 17, and "to" in Ch. 30. Also, I can't help but wonder if there's a better word to use than "scower" in Ch. 22. Scower (or scour) means "to clean or brighten the surface of (something) by rubbing it hard, typically with an abrasive or detergent". While I can obviously see how you're not using a scrub brush here, I don't think the guy is "cleaning or brightening" here.
Again, another word that might be used wrong: "devoutly" in Ch. 23. Devout means "totally committed to a cause or belief". It doesn't make sense for someone to "devoutly shatter them" as you said. Maybe you could find another word?
Again, great job! These poems are amazing! Keep it up!