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1 chapter / 1967 words

Approximately 10 minutes to read

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For the Internet Besties contest!
*NOT LOOKING FOR REVIEWS AT THE MOMENT. NEEDS EDITING*

Comments(3)

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7 months ago Angeline D. Emile said:

Ossmmm......!!!

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7 months ago BlackRose said:

IT really good

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8 months ago Millieron D. Emile said:

Its AWESOME dear.I just loved it!!!

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5 months ago Prajakta Armin said:

This piece really appeared to be unique. I enjoyed reading this story.

Except a few tense confusion, everything seemed to be okay. However the ending was a bit straight forward , it could be a bit more descriptive. (Maybe yoy had a word limit)

Good work! Keep it up!

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7 months ago Lilian Winona said:

Overall, it's a good and interesting piece. However I noticed some phrases which can be replaced to ensure the smooth flow.

I would suggest you to go through the piece again in order to find out some syntax errors and typos.

Perhaps some scenes lacked description but I can see you had to follow a word limit, so I won't talk much about that.

Anyways, good job! Keep it up!