Poems

Poems

15 chapters / 608 words

Approximately 3 minutes to read

Genres:

Writing

Comments(8)

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about 1 month ago •Jinghay• said:

WHY NOT TONIGHT! XD Sorry lol I loveddd the updates! The teacher one is so relatable- basically all my teachers are like that.

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about 1 month ago •Jinghay• said:

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about 1 month ago heels over head said:

I like smile. It really brings the true reason of why we fake smiles so often.

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about 1 month ago •Jinghay• said:

Loved the newest update! Eyes are amazing.

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25 days ago Brooke Coffey said:

You have a real knack for peotry. Pat of these were quite funny and relatable, like the razor burn. Good god is that relatable. I love that! It makes it easy to visualize.

In boys, I would choose I would find better synonyms for "bad" and "good". That's not picky but... there ya go.

Static was my favorite poem.

You're a great writer and I really enjoyed this swap!

Brooke :)

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about 1 month ago LeChevalierRoland said:

Daww. That is how I felt after chapter nine. A sad daww. You have a repetitive style and while sometimes it doesn’t help, in this case it really did. I really related to the end of chapter eight. That feeling of just wanting to go to bed and sleep forever is rather universal. Of course it also sounds borderline depression, but I think people can understand that feeling. I also really liked chapter 7. It flowed well. I enjoyed the repetition of chapter five. Chapter six had me wondering what you were alluding to. I felt like the narrator could be talking about the boy’s gf. But I also felt it could be the boy talking about the narrator. I felt that was more likely, but considering the hateful tone it didn’t make sense. Why would he speak about her when she is so good to him? Some things to work on: 1. First italics in chapter 6 are good, but second felt excessive. 2. First stanza felt choppy. Overall, your lines are usually rather short and sometimes it works. Sometimes it is too short. Overall, a good piece.