Varvana's Gift

Varvana's Gift

4 chapters / 8832 words

Approximately 44 minutes to read


This is the second draft of Varvana's Gift so far. I will update as I edit each chapter.

Scarlett has been waiting for this chance her entire life; the chance to get close to the King. By traveling to the Capital, she will be entering into a contest to become the prince's bride. But things get more complicated as she travels into the politics of court. Will she make it out unharmed?



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3 months ago C.M. Brighid Bachleda said:

All three chapters were well written and I look forward to the next installment...



about 3 hours ago A.D. Emile {Kyron} said:

I laughed at what Markus, the guard did***

(I missed 'did' last time. Sorry for the typo)


about 3 hours ago A.D. Emile {Kyron} said:

(I read the first chapter only)

The title itself is awesome. Clever choice of name, I'd say.

Vivid description, it dragged me right into the story. Enough to keep a reader glued to the piece.

I laughed at what Markus, the guard. According to Liana, or the narrator, she found it enjoyable to play with the guard's fear of her dad. But I think, the thing was expressed in a single line only. Her act didn't express it at all. In the story, she could've teased the guard a bit to make the sentence believable.

The man who played with Liana sounded smart. But I'd suggest you to add some more description about him.

I felt that the man gave up too easily during his fight with Liana. You can add a bit to the fight scene to make it more realistic.

The last para was engaging. But for some reason I felt that the issue of killing the king came up suddenly.

These are just personal thoughts and suggestions, please don't take them too seriously.

In a word, good concept. Beautifully written. It has the potential to become a great story. Keep it up :)