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Joe, a golden retriever, has spent years eating disgusting, organic dog food. Now he decides to embark on a dangerous journey, full of peril and sacrifice, to eat Thanksgiving dinner. Will he succeed? And if so at what cost?
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6 days ago J.T.Loomis said:
Ha! I never thought about dogs this way! Good job on that. It's always nice when stereotypes get broken. Your intro was good, but the last line or two didn't feel completely natural. It's not really something I can explain, so it might just be me, but I noticed it all throughout your work. I wouldn't worry about it too much though. I'm pretty sure I've seen the same thing in some of my older writings, and it eventually went away. (Unless, of course, I am completely blind when it comes to my own work, which is entirely possible). What I'm trying to say is, it will go away as you continue to write. This was the only problem I saw with your story, aside from a few grammatical errors (which might just have been in my head as I can't think of any specifically). Good job overall, I look forward to seeing what you will write next.