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A patriotic piece.


Writing, Poetry


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7 months ago Coral Vaci said:

I love how patriotic this is! And the way you repeat the phrase "Everyday I love". :D


7 months ago Ané said:

Your poem is very beautiful! It perfectly captures all your feelings towards your country and makes me feel them with you. Amazing descriptions!


8 months ago Annalynn Parker said:

Quite patriotic!


8 months ago Angeline D. Emile said:




3 months ago Kiamesha Denise Sims said:

What a wonderful piece.

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5 months ago Naomi Folettia said:

A very nice poem! I liked how the stanzas? sentences? flowed from one to another. I really liked "Everyday I try/To figure out how it feels-/To be apart".

The only critique I have is the last part "Your soil will not be there anymore" seems a bit wordy because the flow you had for the last parts in other places was short. Shortening it will make the ending flow together with the rest of the piece. Maybe "Your soil, gone from beneath my hand" or something like that. I'm not sure but I feel like there's a nice way to shorten it.

Overall, very nice. Well done.

Happy Writing! :D