Bereavement of soul

Bereavement of soul

1 chapter / 356 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

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about 1 month ago Sneha said:

Thanks for the heart and review..:).. Yeah he's Kani's father.

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about 1 month ago A.D. Emile {Kyron} said:

The piece is short yet powerful. I loved the idea of bringing up a fragment of life like this. I've a little confusion with the dead person, who is he actually? Kani's father?

Great concept! Keep it up!

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about 1 month ago Sneha said:

Hi All,

Kindly go through the story and provide me your reviews. Only your reviews could help me improve :).

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about 1 month ago Eowyn Doyle said:

This is very good. A bit confusing in places, but good all the same.

ADVICE:

1)You use ellipses a lot. Maybe you could use another type of punctuation in some places.

2)As I said above, it is a bit confusing in places. Maybe add descriptions of the characters or flashes of memory so we know a bit more of what is going on.

I really liked it! I am looking forwards to reading more of your works.

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about 1 month ago Sneha said:

Hi All,

Kindly go through the story and provide me your reviews. Only your reviews could help me improve :).