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4 days ago Sneha said:
Thanks for the heart and review..:)..
Yeah he's Kani's father.
4 days ago Auroni D. Emile (Kyron) said:
The piece is short yet powerful. I loved the idea of bringing up a fragment of life like this. I've a little confusion with the dead person, who is he actually? Kani's father?
Great concept! Keep it up!
5 days ago Sneha said:
Kindly go through the story and provide me your reviews. Only your reviews could help me improve :).
1 day ago Eowyn Doyle said:
This is very good. A bit confusing in places, but good all the same.
1)You use ellipses a lot. Maybe you could use another type of punctuation in some places.
2)As I said above, it is a bit confusing in places. Maybe add descriptions of the characters or flashes of memory so we know a bit more of what is going on.
I really liked it! I am looking forwards to reading more of your works.