The Dark Triad

The Dark Triad

12 chapters / 28548 words

Approximately about 2 hours to read


Set in a dystopian society, eight teenagers are arrested and sent to a prison that looks almost like its own town. Only, they're the only eight people there. In addition to navigating through the complex governmental justice system, they have to fight for their own freedom. But are they willing to pay the price of freedom and leave their friends behind?


Dystopian, Mystery, Novel



5 days ago Dusty Parrish said:

New conspiracy theory strand! (I'm going back and re-reading things so sorry if this gets super long or convoluted in any way: Includes Chapter 1 and 4 information primarily)...

Why do think Sidonie thinks Gabe is trying to sleep with her [Mya] (or whether you think she [Sidonie] has reason to exaggerate)?:

(Chapter 1) I do find it a bit odd that she was SO persistent in trying to get Mya to go to this party when clearly she's never really been like that before. She goes off on this huge [political] tangent about why they should be safe to go and whatnot and Mya even says "When did you get so political?" But then Sidonie just brushes it off. I find this a bit strange going back and re-reading this.

Ah, so in Sidonie's super confusing drama-filled story she mentioned that she started talking to Gabe. " One of my neighbors, Gabe, lives just over the border. I usually don’t talk to him, since he goes to the private school, but we saw each other a little bit ago, and we started talking..." then she goes on to explain what Gabe had heard about the happenings of this particular party and why she wanted to go so bad.

I'm wondering if something they had talked about was what makes Sidonie say what she does in chapter 4... I'm not really sure what he could have said, though, in chapter 4 there's this little bit:

“Seriously? That’s so cool! I don’t even know where I’m working yet. The head official was really vague when she explained it. I know it’s inside the government building somewhere though.”

"As…what? I didn’t think they’d give you a job assignment.”

Mya raised her eyebrows, defensively crossing her arms. “…why not?” she hesitated.

“Oh, I don’t know. I didn’t mean to offend you sorry, it’s not that big of a deal. I just didn’t think they’d make you, or Sid, work like us.” If Mya were more like Sidonie, she would have pressed harder. She knew her friend would have taken down Gabriel for being sexist, prejudiced, stupid – whatever.

So basically I'm wondering if Gabe ended up saying something like that, offending Sidonie, leading her to believe he was sexist, prejudice, and stupid or whatever so basing off her interaction with him she was warning Mya about what could potentionally happen or something?

DUDE!!! I just got an idea... What if Sidonie is in on like ALL of this. What if she's supposed to be an instigator or something, meant to stir up trouble between everyone, make everyone paranoid and suspicious that sort of thing. Try to see if she can entice the Dark Triad out of everyone. She's an extremely good actress so it would make sense, plus she seems a lot more calm than everyone else, almost like she knows the secret behind everything... Or at least she THINKS she does... O.O Idk maybe I'm reading too much into things xD I still love her character so much and want to know more about her. I do think she was exaggerating with things in Chapter 4 though and that's sort of my theory as to why she would blow everything out of proportion  (to entice certain behavior in people) O.O

(Oops, I sort of just answered your last question first xD)

Did information in this chapter [chapter 4] change any of the theories you had before?:

Hmm... I don't think so...? At least not yet... I still think Spencer had something to do with Levi since there seems to be missing time with him being in the room and being found by the police (maybe that's just the way I'm reading it though?) And I do think Sidonie might still have a connection with Elliot from the prologue (hey, who knows maybe they're in on everything together *dramatic piano key smasging* What? I never said I could play the piano xD *adjusts collar of shirt nervously* I seriously hope I didn't break that piano O.O) ANYWAYS...

I think, if anything it gave me a new theory about Sidonie to add to the old one (as explained above)

I'm left with even more questions (that I'm still trying to piece together) examples: What exactly happened at that party? Why is it that only 8 of them were arrested? On top of that, being the ONLY 8 that WEREN'T doing anything wrong (at least as far as we know)?

who do you trust, if anyone?:

*nervous cackling* I'm not sure I DO trust anyone at this point, not even Mya as the narrator xD

In this chapter we didn't see Levi, but I am sort of trusting him for the moment, which could probably change in the next chapter xD Honestly I'm rooting for him, right now him and Sidnoie (even though I've become SUPER suspicious of her) are still my favorites...

You know VERY well how much me and my review demon dislike Spencer, so it's pretty much a given that I don't trust the little snoggerfluff. xD

I think at this point Sidonie is acting extremely suspicious  (and re-reading is sort of further spiking my suspicions of her again as stated above)

I do trust what Gabe has said so far, though I think he's holding something important back which I'm also rather suspicious of, like I seriously want to know what/why he's holding back what he knows.

Mya sort of hints that she might be losing it because you can hallucinate if you were introduced to severe trauma (worded much better by you xD) so now the reader is left in this hazy cloud of do we trust her, or don't we? She seems rather intuitive, but she's also oblivious to other things because of her own bais...

I think those were all the characters mentioned in Chapter 4?

Why you think the rest of Spencer's friends act the way that they to toward Mya?:

I feel like they know how Spencer is and either know how he is with her or can SUSPECT how he is with her and they all seem to want to protect her from that. I feel like they all see her as this dainty delicate FLOWER (dude, maybe that's why there's a flower painted on her wall!) that they see as needing to be protected because she can't fend for herself or something?

I think that answers everything you asked? My mind is being angry and doesn't want to help me make any connections at the moment so I hope this makes sense. xD

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24 days ago Lauren Harrell said:

UGH. I hate how Figment throws everything into one giant paragraph! I'm sorry if it's confusing to read!


26 days ago Dusty Parrish said:

(Conspiracy) Theory time! xD (For Chapter 2) Sorry if it's jumbled I'm writing as I think of everything:

Government: This is a bit of a tough one that I'm still trying to piece together. Given the title and the fact that you mentioned it was going to get super psychological I'm wondering if this is all some sort of large-scale social experiment?

I feel like the government is playing puppet master with the citizens and using both real (if you can completely call them that) as well as false statements to test how an individual will react to such accusations. Will they be willing to defy an authority figure or will they try to comply to stay out of trouble? How far will they go to save themselves and will they be willing to bring other people down with them?

I feel like they're trying to test the limits of these people and are trying to figure out if humans are inherently 'evil' so to speak (possessing traits in the dark triad) or if they are 'good' and will be able to overcome things like the dark triad (to fight against their true nature or something along those lines.) Will a person give in to temptation for these dark thoughts or will they fight against them (I guess might be a better way to word it?)

As I said, still trying to piece together the interworking's of this corrupt government but I know something is (obviously) wrong. Hopefully what I said here makes sense? xD

Levi's confession: This didn't sit right with me because it didn't seem to fit his character (or what I was interpreting his character to be I suppose would be a better way to word it xD)

So from when Mya first interacts with him: "Levi immediately smiled weakly, crossing his arms over his chest in slight embarrassment. "Hey Mya, is everything alright with you? The rest of us were together when they came but..." he trailed off.

From this reaction I almost get the feeling that he might have a slight crush on her? 1.) He immediately smiled when he saw her. 2.)The first thing he asks is "everything alright with you?"

I also feel like maybe he saw her and Spencer together? 1.) He's embarrassed and you aren't quite sure why, unless it's just because it's the first party she goes to and they all get caught though something tells me that's not quite what it is. 2.) He trails off when he says 'the rest of us were together when they came but...' from this (to me at least) is seems like maybe he knows where she was? And perhaps who she was with?

At the beginning of the chapter you mention that Spencer is gone but I'm not entirely sure WHEN he was gone or HOW he left (did he walk out on his own, was he taken out by the officers) it wasn't completely clear... I'm wondering, if he was escorted by the officers if he was somehow able to get away then he and Levi had a run-in...

In the room you say: "...but as he sat back down she caught a glimpse of the far side of his face and noticed it was bruised and cut."

This makes me believe that he was in a scuffle (added to his conviction) but from his reaction earlier I feel like maybe he found out about what happened with Spencer and Mya (and Levi likes her and knows how Spencer treats her or something as he seems to be rather observant) and lost his temper with Spencer, attacking him maybe?

You don't get to see Spencer all that well, so you don't know if he has any cuts or bruises. Hell, Levi could just be a crappy fighter and wasn't able to land any punches. But my last point with this is at the end with Spencer's conviction. SOMEONE is clearly playing favorites, I mean really? That's ALL he gets off with? That's so messed up. I'm just not quite sure WHY they're playing favorites with him or WHO exactly is favoring him.

Sidonie and Elliot connection: So when you mentioned the little girl at the beginning you say that she had blue eyes (and my guess is they would have to be pretty distinct since he was standing up on a podium with lights and whatnot shining in his face, but for some reason this little girl with blue eyes held his gaze captive.

I believe you mentioned that Sidonie has blue eyes, like distinctly blue ones (Mya has brown with a ring of blue around them) but from the sound of it the blue isn't really all that noticeable and from such a distance away (as I think I might have mentioned before? I'm not sure though xD) I don't think Elliot would have noticed a detail as minor as this one.

The prologue takes place nine years before the first chapter and so-on... The little girl was about half Elliot's age (which you mentioned as being sixteen... half of that would bring the little girl down to eight) then nine years later... So 8+9 would bring the little girl to the age of seventeen now, which seems to be around Mya and Sidonie's age.

Although the story is being told from Mya's point of view at the moment it sort of lines up with the first chapter being primarily from Elliot's. In both view points the little girl and Sidonie are these really intriguing characters. They don't get much screen time, but you can tell there's more than meet the eye to both of these characters and you can't help but be drawn to them, wanting to find out more. They way you describe both of them seems similar to me that fact that the little girl wasn't afraid and seemed to go against the norm for what he was witnessing from everyone else. The fact that Sidonie was the only one who wasn't freaking out when they were all taken in... They just seem really similar in character to me. And both seem curious to get to the bottom of everything that's going down...

Honestly I think Sidonie is quickly becoming one of my favorite characters next to Levi and Elliot. (I love Mya too, don't get me wrong, I'm just super curious to find out about Sidonie and Levi's stories.) ;3

Sorry if this comment got a bit long, and I hope it helps at least a bit or that my ramblings make sense. xD


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4 days ago Nocturne said:

Chapter 4

“[/]You can’t let Spencer get special treatment…[/]” - I mean to put the sentence in italics since it looks like an actual thought, not part of the narrating.

“she didn’t feel angry[; or .] she just wanted”

At first I wasn’t quite sure why she wanted to avoid Spencer, but now I see in the next paragraph that she was just confused and wanted to know why he wasn’t taking responsibility. Maybe move or add some of that thinking earlier?

“‘nine year[s] less’”

Wow, I can’t believe Spencer right now. But it’s also still interesting that though they were technically caught together, Mya was given the sentence for it instead of him. So even if he or she tried to turn him in, the government probably still won’t do anything about it

Omg Mya, what did you even see in him?

“Why [was] he suddenly acting”

Who says “Cool, isn’t it?”? I’m guessing Gabe so maybe clarify that


“The further forward they walked” - I think “forward” is unnecessary here

“racing through her mind what seemed like incessantly” - do you mean she’s thinking about things other than the beautiful scenery?...because that’s what the next sentence is about. Maybe reword this?

“‘to keep [us] locked up’”

Okay, Gabe’s reasoning sounds plausible.

Oh nevermind, Gabe said they’ll all have to be in an actual prison after this is over

I get why Sidonie was worried about Gabe getting into Mya's pants, but it’s contradictory to what she said in the last chapter when she was making fun of


Now this is getting more interesting! The waterfall and the caves were already eerie, but with the real talk with Gabe and Sidonie acting weird I'm even more intrigued! I don't have any major negatives about this chapter, and it actually had more of Mya's thoughts compared to the last one, so great job with that!

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4 days ago Nicolas Abo said:

First of all, I am sorry for not reviewing every chapter by itself. I know it's a bad excuse but I left your story at the end of my "Swap List" because it was 2 hours long. (shame on me, right? 2nd excuse: it's 4 am and I haven't slept in a day so I'm a bit clunky). Anyway! First of all I must say that I really liked... Everything. I was a bit confused at first because I was like "Well hold up where's Elliot for like most of the story?". I'm sure you don't want me to keep on complimenting you (even though you deserve it) as much as you want to see some constructive criticism. A bit that I thought you could improve was like right when Elliot told her that he has seen her memories. You could make it a bit more dramatic I'm pretty sure, though nothing comes to mind (see excuse no2). Another one was when she talked about Pyrce (Sorry if I spelled name wrong. See excuse no2). You could make it so that he'd instantly grab her hair and say that, not the other way around. Except for those, I really enjoyed what you've written so far ! (I trust that you'll continue this, right?)