Big Girls Don't Cry

Big Girls Don't Cry

5 chapters / 4098 words

Approximately 20 minutes to read

Description:

A young teenager battles through depression, but when she goes to a mental hospital, she realizes that her life can change. She will be going through many challenges, but in the end everything is nothing as it used to be. And the sad thing is that it's a true story.

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3 months ago Scarlet Warrior said:

Wat the 5th chap- wat!!!!!!!????????

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3 months ago Rose K said:

I love how the depression and abuse is not overly exaggerated, I mean, she is definitely being abused but sometimes I feel like books exaggerate it too much, and I get that that does happen, and it's a REALLY BIG problem, but it's just a pity story after that and everyone just reads it and gets depressed for the next few days. I feel like your story really managed that well. ;) I didn't find any spelling or grammar mistakes that really stuck out, it looks like the story is nicely cleaned up. :) I loved the romance and drama and how you really made it feel real. I think you should include a trigger warning in the beginning for the part when her father kills a deer because there are some people who are really sensitive to that. I know I was really like wow that's horrible. ;( K, yeah I really didn't find much that needed fixing, nicely well-rounded story, I really enjoyed it. :)

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3 months ago carlie stanco said:

Wow such a interesting story! Great job keep up the great work!

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4 months ago A. G. Austin said:

Hey so great job! I read chapter 1 and it was really good. It is obviious that you have a great gift of writing.

there are a few grammar/spelling mistakes that can from just reading the story aloud.

One such mistake is "Cat. Get up. Your safe, I promise." "Your"should become "you're". Shortly after this she is lying on the bed, you wrote "she lied". This means she lied to the bed, not lying on the bed.

This is a great story, you just need to fix a few mistakes. Hope this helps, -A

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5 months ago Auri said:

What stood out to me the most about this story, was the amount of depth and description the author put into this story. It felt quite real, to the point of gut-wrenching heartache for the narrator, and at times I felt brought to the point of tears. Social pressures aren't easy, and I felt that you brought attention to those rather clearly as well as show us that what others, or even ourselves, see as weaknesses are actually strengths. Thank you for sharing your story.

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5 months ago Auri said:

What stood out to me the most about this story, was the amount of depth and description the author put into this story. It felt quite real, to the point of gut-wrenching heartache for the narrator, and at times I felt brought to the point of tears. Social pressures aren't easy, and I felt that you brought attention to those rather clearly as well as show us that what others, or even ourselves, see as weaknesses are actually strengths. Thank you for sharing your story.