Tears in life

Tears in life

1 chapter / 182 words

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Okay people this is a poem that sums up my life.

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2 days ago Rose K said:

keep going. It will get easier.

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2 days ago Rose K said:

:( good job. But I think your life is more than that, you can find joy in the past and the future even if there is none in the present.

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3 days ago Rhys Grammling said:

Beautiful and sad.

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3 days ago Daniel Mathers said:

Consider changing the lines "But I sort of do", "I awake" should be "I wake", "would last night in my life", "would last before ng in the", "more angrier" should be "more angry" or "angrier", and "It still is".

Overall well done, make some edits and it could be a very fluent well-written poem. I left those edits up to you but gave you the lines that would improve (or that dont make sense grammatically) if changed,