Regret...

Regret...

1 chapter / 313 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

Trigger warning
This story involves self-harm and very delicate topics; I hope no one gets offended by this and please keep an open mind!

Comments(4)

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about 1 month ago Christian Chafino said:

Someone from the Young Writers group too! While reading it I had a feeling the person had committed suicide. What goes through my mind when reading it is "what do people that left feel afterwards." Sometimes I wonder if they do regret their actions. Hope to see more from you

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about 1 month ago WingsofAnEagle said:

Oh, this makes me so sad! Awesome writing, full of depth and so emotional. Keep it up!

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about 1 month ago Kayla Amaro said:

This was short but what was written is powerful. That's good writing right there.

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about 1 month ago Lori Ohman said:

A great and quick read, worth the time!

Reviews(5)

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about 1 month ago Ella said:

Hooooo boy. This one got me right in the feels.

Ok, so this definitely is a delicate subject, and for the most part, I think you handled it well.

"I wasn't wanted so I left, and now they want me?" This was a very good line, and I think it portrays the feelings of depression clouding out all the love and joy in life.

The last word, where it just says regret, was very impactful. I liked out it ended abruptly.

Honestly, if you had to improve this in any way, I would perhaps add a little more. Not a lot, the short, flash fiction-esque style suits this piece very well. I would just add a few details here and there, just enough to add some more weight to the story. I would also like to see a little more flow towards the end, especially with the vegetable cutting scene. The beginning flowed very well, but the vegetable scene didn't flow as well to me (It might just be my weird musical brain though).

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this. It was a unique perspective on suicide that was handled well.

I hope my review helped! (:

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about 1 month ago A.D. Royale said:

Your comment in the Young Authors group only said that this would be impactful.

Indeed, that is a good description. "Regret" was an impactful 212 words down to the last one. Suicide is a delicate, but important, conversation, and this is a great conversation launcher. Well done, Cassie.

A.D.