The Other Side Of The Glass

The Other Side Of The Glass

1 chapter / 3030 words

Approximately 15 minutes to read

Description:

***SHORT STORY***
"If only my life could be as beautiful as it is on the other side of the glass, " so wishes Lesley, a teenager who has lost all love of life.

She looks at the world through the frost and fog of her past, distorted from a tear in the family that shredded her life to bits.

But what if she meets a mysterious old man with the uncanny ability to reach inside her thoughts?

And what happens when this bookman reawakens the magic that slept right beneath Lesley's nose?

MAKE SURE TO READ THE OTHER BOOKS IN THIS SERIES "A Heart Worth Healing" and "Love For Katrina"

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15 days ago Wiwaxia said:

Sorry, I meant to separate the numbered list of grammar revisions in the review to make it easier to read, but somehow they got tangled up. I'll re-post them here.

1. Maybe one day she'll realize that life enjoys smiting out happiness ("smoting" -> "smiting"; "smite" is the correct present tense, although "smoting" is apparently accepted as an Urban Dictionary word).

2. At the word "bookstore" (change single quotation marks to double quotation marks)

3. No book could ever lure me into the boundaries of its cover again ("it's" -> "its").

4. There's a question in his eyes too ("to" -> "too").

5. Mom had one too ("to" -> "too").

6. They professed that (my) she wasn't coming back (erase a space between "wasn't" and "coming"; the "my" is technically not really grammatically correct, but could be used to emphasize how important Katrina was to Lesley, so I put it in parentheses for you to decide.)

7. I too lived with a joyful song in my heart day by day (again, "to" -> "too"; this seems to be a recurring one, so I think that you should take a careful look at these in your other works as well).

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about 1 month ago Alexandra Turner said:

I can't quite get over how relatable this story is. It's great. I would like to know more about why Lesley fell into her state of depression. (It's touched upon incredibly briefly in the story. But I'd like to know more... Maybe another story (you said you would like to do a series) on this would be cool.)

Well done! :D

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15 days ago A.G. Wade said:

Ahhhhh I just want to say, the imagery in this - especially the beginning - is PERFECT. It really got me into the mood of the story right off the bat. ^.^

Aw man, the line "I can't squelch her happiness, just because I've lost mine.' just hit me right in the life feels. E_E It's so powerful, especially in relation to her happy-go-lucky little sister.

Wow. The bit about the happy dark smudges (people, ahaha) is so...accurate. This piece truly captures the emotions and lack thereof behind depression... between the observations, the despair of the main character, and her hope for her sister's happiness, this is truly special.

This has been a very enjoyable read - even as I relate to it in so many ways. You have a unique and completely readable voice to your writings - you certainly deserve a follow. ^.^ Thank you so much for the opportunity to read this!

~ A.G.

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15 days ago Wiwaxia said:

For your second question, I actually like your theme very much. It doesn't feel didactic and for some reason, almost feels like that of Coraline, if you know the story. Besides, any close reader can see that your story is not just saying "Buy books! They're healthy for you!" (though there's nothing wrong with that either); it's about a family overcoming their troubles through their love of books. So yes, I strongly feel that you should keep the theme.