The Other Side Of The Glass

The Other Side Of The Glass

1 chapter / 3995 words

Approximately 20 minutes to read


***SHORT STORY*** This book is dedicated to all the silent sufferers that endure much, yet may never be healed. To the people who yearn to be understood, but never are.


"If only my life could be as beautiful as it is on the other side of the glass, " so wishes Lesley, a teenager who has lost all love of life. She looks at the world through the frost and fog of her past, distorted from a tear in the family that shredded her life to bits.

But what if she meets a mysterious old man with the uncanny ability to reach inside her thoughts?

And what happens when this bookman reawakens the magic that slept right beneath Lesley's nose?

COVER CREDITS: Daniel Jimeneze



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4 months ago Coral Vaci said:

This is so relatable and powerful. Your voice and description are very good! I can't describe how much I love this story.


4 months ago Wiwaxia said:

Sorry, I meant to separate the numbered list of grammar revisions in the review to make it easier to read, but somehow they got tangled up. I'll re-post them here.

1. Maybe one day she'll realize that life enjoys smiting out happiness ("smoting" -> "smiting"; "smite" is the correct present tense, although "smoting" is apparently accepted as an Urban Dictionary word).

2. At the word "bookstore" (change single quotation marks to double quotation marks)

3. No book could ever lure me into the boundaries of its cover again ("it's" -> "its").

4. There's a question in his eyes too ("to" -> "too").

5. Mom had one too ("to" -> "too").

6. They professed that (my) she wasn't coming back (erase a space between "wasn't" and "coming"; the "my" is technically not really grammatically correct, but could be used to emphasize how important Katrina was to Lesley, so I put it in parentheses for you to decide.)

7. I too lived with a joyful song in my heart day by day (again, "to" -> "too"; this seems to be a recurring one, so I think that you should take a careful look at these in your other works as well).

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5 months ago Alexandra Turner said:

I can't quite get over how relatable this story is. It's great. I would like to know more about why Lesley fell into her state of depression. (It's touched upon incredibly briefly in the story. But I'd like to know more... Maybe another story (you said you would like to do a series) on this would be cool.)

Well done! :D



19 days ago MaryAnn said:

Ok. Let's just dive right into this.

There are a couple of cases where you use the wrong kind of 'to.' Just make sure you keep an eye out with those!

The beginning was amazing. You drew me in right from the start. I wasn't going to read all of it....but i ended up reading all of it and wanting MORE. You have a way with words, Willow!

The beginning was amazing. Then ending wasn't as strong as i would have liked it to be. I would have liked for everything to have been wrapped up. This is a short story, and some of the threads were still dangling.

Overall though, I really did enjoy it. You should consider adding more.

I really hope we can be friends on Underlined! You can find if you want, my username will still be MaryAnn.

I hope this helped you, and keep on writing!


3 months ago Raina K. said:

Wow!!! This was really amazing! At the beginning it kind of made me think about how depression affects our life and how we just want to be happy, but we don't know how...and we just look with jelousy at how others are happy and itš very easy for them... The beginning was very nice and I liked it very much! But the ending..., well it was nice but just wasn't so strong as the beginning. Also a plus on the ending is that it was unpredectable. I couldn't have imagined it would end like this. Anyways, great work and for grammare, I didn't see any mistakes! Good job!