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Not a true poem.
over 5 years ago Katherine the Great said:
Wow! This had beautiful flow, and the meaning behind it caught me by surprise. Great job. I could find nothing wrong with this piece.
over 5 years ago krystelle faulkener said:
I love the way you call it wearing red, and it brings a beautiful but creepy and extremely sad image to mind.
over 5 years ago Allie illusion said:
Wow. This is amazing. I loved it. Again great poem. You have a great gift!
almost 6 years ago Kevin D. Ross said:
I feel as if you should save the word "red" simply for the recurring life of "the night I wore red" simply so it doesn't lose any of it's meaning/impact. Aside from that, there were very few lines that read as clunky, and it was a powerful read. The only other critique I have outside of the previous one would be maybe to foreshadow or clarify all this being done in a manner with no regrets. Throughout the entire poem I read an air of self-hatred, which was completely shattered by the last few lines. I'm not sure if you meant to do this, but I feel as the poem would stand out more if leaving clues that, Yes, I cut, but Yes, I REALLY meant to.
almost 6 years ago Danie Grace said:
I agree with May about the using something else to symbolize the blade to carry through the metaphor of painting. This was an incredible piece and had very strong tensions and beautiful rhythms and phrasing. It also was incredibly intense and captured the narrator's feelings well--the almost casual curiousity that someone in that situation has.
almost 6 years ago May Tesaren said:
Even though it wasn't "a real poem" I really liked it. I think it would be more effective if you found a way to symbolize cutting rather than just say "blade". You know? because you described blood as red paint, why not describe blade as something else, too?
Other than that, this was really good.