War in Shadow

War in Shadow

3 chapters / 2021 words

Approximately 10 minutes to read



over 5 years ago Namesake said:

Grr. Access key.

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over 5 years ago Lee Morvan said:

wow, this is a great start! keep it up :)


almost 6 years ago ~*Dana*~ said:

This was really interesting I can't wait to read more! xD


almost 6 years ago zuiver said:

wow! really well-written and good detail! please keep going!



almost 6 years ago Amarantine said:

You did a really good job describing the characters, really going into depth with who they are, what their relationship is. It really gives the audience an opportunity to care for them. Good imagery, and I like your writing style. Hm... I don't really have much else to say other than to keep writing, because I didn't find any major issues in the first chapter.


almost 6 years ago Chocolate Mousse said:

I'm inclined to say that this was terrible, because that was a terrible thing you did leaving me in suspense. I adore your writing style and how you spent time on the details instead of just adding one or two and then blazing off. You also introduced the characters well, but I think you should make it more clear that Rion (?) is a girl, because at first I was confused.

Anyway, great descriptions, brilliant idea, and fantastic beginning. Please finish this soon! :-)