This is certainly realistic, and very believable. I like that you infused an element of hope into it despite the kind of dark background. Lovely piece :)
I liked how you chose a heroine instead of a hero for a story that deals with alcohol and reckless abandon. We often forget that girls find themselves in these situations too. Also, I really liked how you brought in a Good Samaritan-type figure; I was half-worried that the girl would end up trashed somewhere on the street. Nicely done.
Wow that was great! I really want to read what happens next. And i felt like i was really there with the character. The only thing i can say to do is for you to keep writing! Good job!
This was, in so many ways, amazing. I'm not exaggerating.
The way it's written, the way it flows, the way the reader feels as if they are standing there right with the character, is incredible.
The idea of a perfect stranger comforting and protecting the character is beautiful.
I loved it immensely.
Great job! :)
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10 months ago Trina Elisabeth said:
This is certainly realistic, and very believable. I like that you infused an element of hope into it despite the kind of dark background. Lovely piece :)
over 2 years ago ~*Dana*~ said:
It's really good plzz rite more! :)
over 2 years ago Jillian Spiridon said:
I liked how you chose a heroine instead of a hero for a story that deals with alcohol and reckless abandon. We often forget that girls find themselves in these situations too. Also, I really liked how you brought in a Good Samaritan-type figure; I was half-worried that the girl would end up trashed somewhere on the street. Nicely done.
over 2 years ago Jina! said:
Coool. I like this but I think you spelled blonde wrong?
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over 1 year ago Arie Ellen said:
Wow that was great! I really want to read what happens next. And i felt like i was really there with the character. The only thing i can say to do is for you to keep writing! Good job!
over 2 years ago Parris A. King said:
This was, in so many ways, amazing. I'm not exaggerating. The way it's written, the way it flows, the way the reader feels as if they are standing there right with the character, is incredible. The idea of a perfect stranger comforting and protecting the character is beautiful. I loved it immensely. Great job! :)