Fire and Water

Fire and Water

2 chapters / 506 words

Approximately 3 minutes to read


This will eventually be parts from my massive work in progress, Fire and Water. Right now it's just the proposed prologue, as I have nothing else written that could make sense on it's own.


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over 3 years ago Leila said:

Very beautifully written prologue, I'd love to read more!


over 5 years ago Hosanna Hope Boesche said:

please keep going!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


almost 6 years ago Tiffany Burnett said:

that was good!


about 6 years ago D~phne M,. said:

I really like this. I could even imagine it as being the prologue to a novel! Lots of potential!


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over 6 years ago Account Moved said:

This has a very intriguing start. I love the descriptions, and the way you describe the snow.

I understand how you don't know where to start, could it be that you have the plot already in your mind? If so, that's how I am too. My advice is to just start writing, even if it's in the middle of the story. A beginning will eventually appear to you, in some way, shape or form.

I know it's just the prologue, and I know it's meant to be a little unclear. Maybe you mean it to be be addressed in further chapters, but we don't know anything about the character, or her past, or anything. I'm pretty sure you will describe it later though.

I love how your prologue makes me think of all of the questions I'm thinking: where is this? when is this? Is this fantasy? Just remember to answer these later.

Personally, I don't recommend describing the scenery in the first sentence/paragraph of the novel. It's not much of a hook. Your prologue is beautiful, but it lacks a hook until the end, when the lady finds the stone. I wouldn't delete anything from the prologue, just add a few things towards the beginning. Maybe a mysterious explanation about firefall/firestorm. Or just something mysterious and a cliffhanger, that will be making the reader hanging on. If you write about a mysterious explanation, write it in italics, and then lead it into the snow description.

Overall, you're just beginning, so it's hard to critique it, but I just had to help. It's a beautiful beginning, and I can't wait to see where it leads.

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over 6 years ago AndreaKHill said:

I really like the pieces you have set up here, and if your heart is really, I can give you some advice. I also had trouble starting my novel, and I had three years of planning!

First of all: Characters. I see you already have one so I will put forth some questions you need to ask: is she the protagonist/main character? What is her background? Since this is a Fantasy, what race is she? An original race or a previously used race? (Humans, elves, dwarves, etc.) The more questions you ask about your character, the more you get to know them, thus different reactions to conflicts will flow better. Think of it as a date or an interview, and ask those questions, even if they don't really come up in the midst of the story. This is so they become real to YOU, because if they aren't real to you, then they won't be read to your reader.

World and setting: Is this on Earth? An AU Earth? Alien planet? Something Middle Earth-esque? What are the rules on things like magic? J.K Rowling has said she first thought up what HP witches and wizards *couldn't* do before what they could. This is sound advice. It's a lot easier to think of what people/magic *can* do and it can get out of hand, and you end up with a Mary Sue. Think of the consequences before the actions.

Conflict: This, I found, is something that is easier to build on. Sometimes it's easier to think up a basic conflict, for example, the Hero's Journey, and then build on that. A good basis could keep your mind from making an overly complicated conflict that the character(s) can't get out of. Use this for sub-plots too.

Plots/Sub-plots: Are you going in a more Romance direction, Adventure direction, Thriller direction, etc? Pick one main one and make the others sub-plots. Also, stick with it! Don't make it an adventure based story only to change it to a romance story half way through! You will only anger your readers. Readers have expectations when it comes to certain types of stories, so suddenly switch it. It's frustrating and I've had it done to me (a book I read).

I hope this helps out at least a little bit. I see a lot of potential in that prologue if you just give it a bit of planning. Once you do that part, everything else will fall into place easily.

I hope you continue!