The Games

The Games

4 chapters / 10254 words

Approximately about 1 hour to read

Description:

*IS ON HIATUS UNTIL THE END OF NaNoWriMo* Sorry Peeps.

Genres:

Adventure, Fantasy

Comments(16)

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over 5 years ago Josie Barstad said:

"Tacos, lots and lots of tacos. Ans maybe a burrito."

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almost 6 years ago Lizzie Madloch said:

okay, so i've only read a chunk of the beginning so far, but i'm definitely coming back for me :) enticing diction, descriptions, and dynamics.

:)

Hogwarts

almost 6 years ago You can't see me said:

I only read the first little bit, but the imagery is EXCELLENT.

Merunning_ipiccy

almost 6 years ago Alexa said:

That was amazing! Like, seriously, one of the best things I have ever read! I love stories like that, and you made it extremely unique and creative! Loved the story line, the descriptions, and the characters! (I also loved the little bit of Spanish thrown in, since I speak spanish as well. It made my day!) Awesome, awesome story! PLEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAASE write more!

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almost 6 years ago Jarvis said:

This is pretty good. I'd try to seperate the paragraphs and make them a little smaller, but I do have one major critique.

The Hunger Games.

The Intergalactic Games.

My first thought was connecting the two, something you won't be able to avoid until The Hunger Games is a distant memory for all but diehard fans. If there is any synonym for Games you can use, I would use it.

Olympiad, maybe, if it was started by humans, or another slang.

Other than that, however, good job!

Disneyprincess

almost 6 years ago Amme Forever said:

The very idea of this was cool, and I like the way she talked about Earth, very funny, and you got that point of view great. The images were fantastic and I like all the descriptions. The only thing I would say is indent when you start a new paragraph, but that's easy. Keep writing.