Pomegranate Seeds

Pomegranate Seeds

1 chapter / 497 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

When Marisa was seven years old, she was stolen away to Faerieland.

Comments(19)

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about 5 years ago Sarah Whitla said:

Good FOR this story*

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about 5 years ago Sarah Whitla said:

This was very good! I came across it on the home page and decided to take a look. You have a lovely writing style that draws the reader in -- almost Suzanne Collins, but a little less personal, which is good god this story. I didn't notice any errors at all. I think it would be fine to leave it as it is rather than continuing it, but it would also make a good novel. It was a very refreshing thing to read! Good luck!

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over 5 years ago Nobody said:

Oh, I totally get the title! It's like that Greek myth, where Persephone got stuck in the Underworld for three months because she ate the Pomegranate Seeds! Haha! Sorry, I just felt like saying that...

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over 5 years ago Kat Doodler said:

Nice creative story. Wanna swap?

Reviews(3)

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about 6 years ago 1 said:

This was incredibly well written, I loved every word! The way that your wrote it enticed be in such a way that i wouldn't have stopped reading unless something drastic had came to pass. This was excellent, i am thoroughly impressed! Marissa is a well defined character, in meaning to being innocent and eyes enamoured with the glamour of the world around her, and the fact that despite this glamour, within her soul she knows it is not real and she starves for what truly is. Amazing job!

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over 6 years ago Sequoia said:

I, to, was confused by the title, and this line: "an old human couple who had loved her in a way that faeries knew now how to." sounded as if it should be: "an old human couple who had loved her in a way that Faeries knew not how to." Other than that I loved it and really want to read more, it makes me wish that I could find more stories like this in the Real library.