Mays Story

Mays Story

1 chapter / 214 words

Approximately 1 minute to read

Description:

May tells her story to young Dove and Sun.

Comments(1)

Dscn0849

almost 4 years ago Madeleine said:

hey!

Reviews(1)

Photo on 2012-02-11 at 22.45 #2

over 2 years ago Natalie Johnston said:

I think this is off to a good enough start, but it needs a lot of work and improvement, especially grammatically. When you have a good story, sometimes it's overlooked, clouded from sight in errors. Try to fix the minor typos before you continue, because I promise you if you send this to a publisher they will immediately see you as an amateur who needs a lot of work before they are ready to publish because of the errors. Other than that, keep writing, and try to build something off of this story. I know you'd much rather get the "wow, this is amazing!!" comment, but if you want to get better take advice, no matter how much you hate it.