Desert Shadows

Desert Shadows

18 chapters / 10084 words

Approximately about 1 hour to read


This is a short story I wrote in 6th grade.



over 5 years ago Lieder Madchen said:

Ooh, very nice premise and beginning. It needs a lot of editing for grammar/spelling/punctuation but I love the situation and the characters. Write more!


over 5 years ago Lauren said:

funny in the beginning, i liked Nareena's character and fiersome personality, but I don't really understand much about the story, like why are they fighting, why are they stealing, why are they paired together in the desert... Perhaps you could detail the background a bit more... pther than that a lot less spelling mistakes. Nice idea

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over 5 years ago Laura Sink said:

I'm about to fall over asleep onto the computer... Night.

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over 5 years ago Brigid Griffin said:

Ya pretty much. He'll die for Nareena if you haven't guessed that yet.



over 5 years ago Dylan Bennett said:

I find it very impressive that you were only in 6th grade when you wrote this. It's far better than that. I know I couldn't write like this when I was in 6th grade. It had an interesting premise, and a very captivating plot that I found myself drawn to. I literally couldn't stop reading, so I'm glad you asked me to check this one out. I had kind of a hard time figuring out what was going on at first, but as it progressed, oh man I was soooo into it! There was a huge smile on my face when it turned out Kyle was going to get to be the leader. I seriously love that ending! Really, really amazing job.


over 5 years ago Tyanna J Snider said:

This was really good KEEP GOING!