Starvation

Starvation

9 chapters / 14255 words

Approximately about 1 hour to read

Description:

*COMPLETED AT LAST!! (For the Partials Challenge Contest.)* Mr. Stone rules cruelly over his town with an iron fist, keeping most of its resources, like food and money, to himself. His bullying reign goes on until Mary and her friends can't take it anymore. So, one night, they sneak into his gardens to take some of his food for themselves.

Comments(10)

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over 5 years ago The Girl of Many Names said:

I LOVED THE ENDING!!!!!!!

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over 5 years ago The Girl of Many Names said:

I LOVED THE ENDING!!!!!!!

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almost 6 years ago J.D. Castle said:

I've read several chapters, and I'll come back to finish it later. This is wonderful! The way you write is beautiful and unique :) The characters are well-described and quite interesting people -had they been real. The plot is also very unique and I love it! Beautiful job! ~ J.D.

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almost 6 years ago Kiwi Lee said:

No problem at all :)

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over 5 years ago Veronica L. Silva said:

So I have officially finished reading "Starvation" and overall, it really was amazing. Good plot and well-written. Your descriptions are spot on, I especially took notice of how you described Mary waking to find the mob infiltrating Mr. Stones property. Your description of the fire was detailed in just the right way and really helped set the scene for readers. Another thing I would like to comment on is how you give each character their own personality. I've always thought that gives me more trouble than it should (when I personally am writing) but you do that just perfectly. I will defiantly be reading your other stories, they all seem interesting. Stay cool. :)

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over 5 years ago Veronica L. Silva said:

Hello, person. I just read the first three chapters of "Starvation" and I already have quite a few things to say. First of all, your writing style is amazing. The vocabulary doesn't sound forced or too fancy, it's completely natural. You describe everything using just the perfect words and literary devices to create a stronger image for the reader. "He was her enemy...but also her only hope." That line was amazing. It was so absolutly GENIUS I stopped reading for a moment because I felt so overwhelmed. I also noticed how the characters remained hopeful and were so well prepared for what they were going to do. It all seems realistic. Especially when Mary remembers the greek myth concerning the pomegranate; it's as though she's subconciously thinking there will most likely be serious consequences. And when the squad has been imprisoned and Mary's reflecting over the whole situation, you can really symphathize with her. You make her emotions, her doubts and conflicts so clear to us even when she hasn't a clue what's going to happen to her and the rest of the squad next. I will certainly continue reading and leaving reviews. :) Much love, -Veronica