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Approximately 4 minutes to read
Snapped then unsnapped. Ripped then taped. Broken then mended. This is what happened to me.
over 3 years ago Indgo Night said:
I love this! It is amazing. It was really good how you changed between the two people and connected their words by running the sentences together.
Reading this made my day. Thank you
over 4 years ago Jamie Linde said:
I love this. I have nothing critical to say. I only have compliments. Firstly, this is a clever writing style. I appreciate how towards the end, the interval of SNAPs quickened. Secondly, I felt the emotions of the characters quite well.
Nice work! I enjoyed reading this.
over 4 years ago Brooklyn Schroeder said:
Wow! this was amazing. this is so different from anything I've ever read. The back and forth narration was a little confusing at first, but it was easy to figure out. I liked how it was kind of a mix of short story and poem. Keep writing :)
almost 5 years ago Jessie Linde said:
This is really good, I've never read anything like it. Keep it up!
almost 6 years ago Caroline said:
Love when you compared her to a hunter, still hungry, and unsatisfied. It adds this gory edge and bitterness that is an absolutely amazing perspective for the guy.
over 6 years ago SridevaS13 said:
Very emotionally awakening.
I saw 2 tiny grammar errors, nothing huge.
let's should be lets, and i was taught to never put "but" at the start of the sentence.
That's about it :)
You did a great job, although the back-and forth narration confused me at first, I caught up :)