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*One of the 5 winners of the Inspiring Lives Contest! :D* Drew hasn't visited his hometown since he left for college, and decides to come back on the 10th anniversary of his brother's death.
over 2 years ago Sofia J. said:
It's really sad, but it is beautifully written. Fantastic job!
over 2 years ago Salina Alicia said:
Woah that was great. I mean you write so well it was gripping and it had my full attention the whole time. Thought it was sad, I really liked the plot and the way you set it up. Great work keep writing
over 2 years ago Anande Sjöden said:
"The house that I played in. The house that we ate in. The house that my brother died in." These lines really hooked me.
This is excellently written. The flashback in the middle to Adam's death is gripping but not overly gruesome. I was a little confused at first, because I didn't realize that the story had switched narrators, so I had to go back and reread that part before I got that it was his brother talking.
I like that he gets closure at the end, and is able to leave his past behind. Still, it's a sad story.
Well done :)
over 2 years ago B. D. Legan said:
I really liked this. :) It was very well written and flawlessly executed. I thought that it was a bit odd that you switched to Adam's point of view in the middle, though.
But anyway, good job!
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