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This happened to my in first grade. One of the scariest moments of my life
over 3 years ago Myla Stewart said:
As I was reading this, I was just thinking the entire time: "Wow, life is so short." Makes me actually think about these things instead of taking them for credit...
over 4 years ago Insertnamehere said:
over 5 years ago Maia Sheinfeld said:
I am sorry this happened to you :(
I think your sentences are a little bit short and choppy at times, and you need to include a little more detail throughout the story, especially when you are in the accident.
Hope this helps, :)
over 5 years ago Ana Mia Depri said:
Well, to tell the truth, I would have cried if I wasn't at school...the descriptions were great, though I would like to know if everyone in the car was ok. Other than that, it was awesome.
over 3 years ago Summer Kingston said:
This is a great piece and I could tell that it was an experience you went through. You had good sensory images, although your sentences were a bit choppy. The emotion puts into perspective how short life can be.
over 5 years ago Sarah G.A. said:
Great Job you had be clinging on from beggining to end BRAVA BRAVA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!