Lost Love

Lost Love

1 chapter / 986 words

Approximately 5 minutes to read


Love fades... or does it?



over 3 years ago KINE said:

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about 5 years ago Kirstin Reine said:

This is so sweet! I love your writing- it flows well:) Good job:)


about 5 years ago Kacii said:

thanks :)


about 5 years ago Momo Lowe said:

Wow this is amazing! Everything really flowed into each other and your MC is great :)


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about 5 years ago Kaybee said:

I thought that this had a great idea behind it. The ending filled me with all these NIFs (nice internal feelings) but the whole thing just seemed too rushed, I do understand that there was a limit for the contest though. There wasn't any character buildup do I couldn't really feel for the character's because I didn't know them, I didn't get a chance to learn about them or become them yet. I wanted to feel sympathy for tug and the girl but I couldn't because it was just all so rushed. And also it did just seem a bit unrealistic that she just happens to find him there working at the coffee shop and then he stops to tell her his whole life story and then she pulls him over the counter to make out. Maybe they could meet later after the shop closes and then talk. That would make more sense. Overall, though, I did enjoy the story and you used great imagery and description. I could completely picture the entire scene unraveling in front of me (even if a bit unrealistic) and you should definitely KEEP WRITING! You're a great writer with some good ideas! :)


about 6 years ago XxxSuzyQtyxxX said:

i agree with florence, amazing!