Wilting

Wilting

1 chapter / 493 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

A reflection on societies today, the story revolves around a young boy who is orphaned when a corrupt army wreaks havoc in his town.

Genres:

Writing, Short Story

Comments(13)

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about 5 years ago Mallakah Khoury said:

Just to make you happy...I was the 100th heart c: Good job

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about 6 years ago Laina O'Shields said:

This is so sad. Really tugged at my heart.

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almost 7 years ago Rosie Majdalani said:

Amazingly creative! Excellent Job!

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almost 7 years ago Tempest Wisdom said:

This reminds me of the Holocaust. Such a deep, deep story.

Reviews(6)

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almost 7 years ago Lois Caine said:

I especially liked the beginning. I'm not too sure how the boy moved form 'his world' to 'their world' but I guess in his walking he entered another country or something. The placement of the required sentence was a bit awkward for me. Did he really cause 'horror'?

Anyway, I really like your writing style

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almost 7 years ago Tempest Wisdom said:

This was a great story. I love the imagery in the first sentence, and how happy he gets when the little girl is nice to him, only to be disappointed by her mother. Criticisms... hmmm... I honestly can't think of anything. How about... nah... maybe you should... nah... try... nope, sorry, can't think of anything, honestly.