Face of the Predator

Face of the Predator

2 chapters / 7172 words

Approximately 36 minutes to read

Description:

Something I wrote awhile ago. Not sure if it's any good or if I should continue it. If you read and comment, I will read and comment yours!

Genres:

Writing, Adventure, Novel

Comments(14)

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almost 5 years ago Lydia Michaels said:

Wow, I really hope you continue it :)

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over 6 years ago Aston Martin said:

One thing I have to say...I have trouble keeping up, now i don't know if that's just me but, hey!on the other hand...HOLY FRIGGIN CHEESES IHTZ!!!OF COURSE YOU SHOULD HEEP WRITTING YOU INSANE GENIUS!!!

Chenier

over 6 years ago Aston Martin said:

One thing I have to say...I have trouble keeping up, now i don't know if that's just me but, hey!on the other hand...HOLY FRIGGIN CHEESES IHTZ!!!OF COURSE YOU SHOULD HEEP WRITTING YOU INSANE GENIUS!!!

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over 6 years ago Scarlett Addison said:

I really like it.. and Totally agree with what people are saying... Great Job... please please write more! xP ~T

Reviews(5)

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about 4 years ago Michael Gunter said:

Rather interesting. Not my usual fare, but well written and well paced. Annoyingly pedestrian when it comes to the whole "teen-angst", but this was secondary. Watch your cliches and pitch the bad guy-good guy dialogue. The rest of the dialogue was ok but this part was really bad. "Come with me or else you will regret your choice" is about as cliche as it comes.

Try this: Bad Guy-"Come with me or else!" Girl-"No way!" Bad guy-"(sigh) You ALWAYS say that. You pitiful little "heroes" NEVER want to come with me! What is it, the suits? Cause I can have the wardrobe redesigned."

Still cliched, but better than original.

Very good as a whole though. Will follow and read as updated.

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over 5 years ago lyder said:

You should go on with this. I'm rather intrigued with those guys in "leather" suits. Reminded me of cenobites for some reason.