The Sky Artist

The Sky Artist

1 chapter / 3272 words

Approximately 16 minutes to read

Description:

A story I wrote and gave to my friend Joaquin Santos for his birthday. Our leading lady steps into a cafe and strikes up a conversation with a mysterious man, who tells her all sorts of insane and wonderful things. Cover made by another one of my best friends, Monique Miranda :D.

Comments(8)

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over 4 years ago Sarah Helene said:

Brilliant!

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over 5 years ago Laina O'Shields said:

That was, without a doubt, the most amazing story i have ever read. It was so beautifully written that it had me crying, it was so wonderful that it had me smiling through its whole entirety. It was flawless. A fascinating idea, because i love the sky, always have. I don't think i'll ever look upwards the same way. (it's a 16 min, but i had to read it, ever so glad i did)

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almost 6 years ago Jillian K. said:

This book is so creative!!!! I love it.

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about 6 years ago Lynn Wong said:

I love the concept of this story. It's a very creative and unique idea. I do agree with some of the others that commented, that Nimbus becomes less mysterious when the story relies solely on dialogue. But altogether, I thought this was an amazing story. (:

Reviews(2)

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about 6 years ago latewla said:

I enjoyed the story, but there are a few things that I would like to touch. At the beginning your description was fantastic and the imagery was great, but when they start talking, you lose it. It becomes more he said/she said than describing what happened. Maybe give Nimbus more description like his eyes sparkle when he describes his job or something of the sort. And maybe he can make more gestures with his hands you can tell us because he is telling a story.

I would also like to see more resistance in Nimbus when he doesn't really want to tell the girl (I think. I forgot if you said if it was a girl or not). Like I said, this is a really good story and very original, but you need to brush it up a bit.

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about 6 years ago Kate DeVantier said:

I love this. I know people have been going on and on about how unique it is, but they're totally right -- what a cool idea! You could turn this into a longer book if you really wanted to. Overall, I think you did a really nice job. There weren't any blatant spelling/punctuation errors that I can remember. I really liked Nimbus; he seemed like quite the character! A few parts made me laugh (: Anyways, splendid job.