Together Alone

Together Alone

5 chapters / 3038 words

Approximately 15 minutes to read

Description:

Taylor Rose didn't know what she wanted. Did she want to be picked and forced in to marriage? She'd be able to have children at least. Or did she want to be free to do as she please but stay single and without kids of her own. Before she could decide though, her fate was chosen for her. Now she must deal with what the Union wants . . . or does she? Wasn't it said, so very long ago, that "the only way to deal with an unfree world is to become so absolutely free that your very existence is an act of rebellion"?

Quote by Albert Camus
Copyright 2011 by Ashtyn Stann

Comments(24)

Nanno

almost 4 years ago Melody Pond said:

I very much liked this!! I loved how you described the process, and how her evasion to it was wonderful. I really want to know what her husband is going to be like!!! Please update

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over 5 years ago S.J. Bouquet said:

Umm.... soooo like... FINISH THIS!!! Please!!! ^_^ I WANT TO MEET THE DUDE!!! :D This is very interesting and I'd love love lloovee to see more!

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over 5 years ago Heather Marie Bowman said:

OMG! I love it, I can't wait to find out how her match and her react to each other when they finally meet face to face :)

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over 5 years ago Elizabeth said:

This is so good. Very well written.

Reviews(3)

Scott and tessa

almost 6 years ago Ariella Ivashkov said:

This really interested me from the beginning. It kind of reminded me of "Matched" by Ally Condie. I like how you portrayed Taylor's mom as very superficial in personality and appearance; it really establishes a "plastic" image in my mind. As for Taylor's description, I think her appearance could be more accentuated if the description were scattered throughout the story rather than concentrated in one paragraph.

I like how Taylor's passive aggressive personality really surfaced during the exam, but the doctor's immediate impatience seems exaggerated. I was under the impression that these doctors are very experienced and therefore would be prepared to accept any response, because essentially there's really not a right answer. Each person is different. However, I noticed a lack of continuity where you mention that Taylor is nervous right before the exam and then the nervousness is nowhere to be seen during or after the exam.

Overall, I really liked this. Nicely written. Keep it up! (:

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almost 6 years ago Kate said:

This was very interesting, and I am curious to see how you continue. I really liked the world you've started building. I was wondering though- WHY is Taylor so resistant to the tests and being chosen? It seems to be something most people would want, not a hardship. If it is the normal way of life, and most matches seem happy, I would like to see what it is that she actually dislikes about the prospect of this arranged marriage and how she came to feel that way. I would also recommend looking through it to fix a few punctuation/grammar errors. Good job and good luck with your writing!