All he Wrote

All he Wrote

1 chapter / 499 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

*Finalist in the Seventeen Magazine 2012 contest!!!* Please click "more" and read this before you read the story
~When asked to read his last words written to me I declined. There wasn’t much to say about them.
"I'm sorry," was all he wrote.
please review, HEART, and comment!

alot of people have mentioned that it isnt clear on the relationship. It isnt supposed to be clear. The relationship is up to the reader to decide. Their within-detail decision determines how powerful the story is for them. Whats the fun when i tell them how tragic it is supposed to be?

ok, now you can read! enjoy! and dont forget to heart!

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Comments(52)

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almost 2 years ago Kaela G said:

Please ignore the below comment. It was a misunderstanding.

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about 2 years ago [Emma] said:

This is really good, and I like the way you managed to show the narrator's emotions and feelings really clearly in less than 500 words, allowing the reader to emphasise with her. Great work!

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over 2 years ago Heather Kirchhoff said:

This is so sad especially since I had almost lost someone that I'm really close to recently by suicide. :( This story really would bring people to realize that other's may be ok on the outside, but is dying on the inside. I loved this story. I loved how you wrote it and how the narrator remembers bits and pieces of the memories thy've had. Hearted!

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over 2 years ago Natalie Harper said:

This is amazing, add more to it :)

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over 2 years ago Miranda Foley said:

This is just amazing. It shows how hard death can be, especially one that tragic. I love the idea you came up with, and you expressed it in such a wonderful way that I almost feel the emotions myself. It was great :)

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over 2 years ago Chocolate Mousse said:

This isn't something I can relate to, but I think it's beautiful and you certainly packed a lot of emotion into 500 words. My only comments are these:

-This sentence is awkward: "My heart pounded in my chest, it skipped beats and sent panic through my body." I'd change it to something like this: "My heart pounded in my chest, skipping beats and sending panic through my body." -Since the narrator is a teenager, I thought it was odd for her to say: "Indeed it was him." -"His body now lies in gruesome ruins" switched the tense - try changing it to "His body lay in gruesome ruins." -And finally, capitalize "after" in the last sentence.