Cliche

Cliche

1 chapter / 480 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

Just a rough draft of a little short love story.
Its raw so judge lightly.

Comments(7)

Black bird

11 months ago Aviline said:

You spelled some things wrong. I noticed you might have meant for in one sentence I don't remember, but you put of. Such a cliche story but it's good!

Iloveyou

over 1 year ago Smile(: said:

The ending was so, well, Cliche. :"} ♥

Images

almost 2 years ago Thomas Murray said:

Great short story. You made the characters pop out and believable. Well written instead of a few little letters that were accedently left out of a couple words. I enjoyed it.

Images

almost 2 years ago Thomas Murray said:

Great short story. You made the characters pop out and believable. Well written instead of a few little letters that were accedently left out of a couple words. I enjoyed it.

Reviews(1)

Desert

over 1 year ago Phil F. said:

I like this a lot. Even in a small time frame you've created a love story that we seem to know the history of more than is actually said and explained. I kept thinking Jake was going to do a better job of apologizing, since I mean, it's a pretty understandable thing to spend time with a family member, unless he had some reason that this one date was so important, like, he'd spent weeks planning it or something.

This love story is a glimpse into what we all kind of want. A best friend to be our significant other, and so fourth. Your descriptions were really great, though, you did have a few typos here and there. Easily fixed.

I'd like it if you cleaned this up and maybe even expanded on it just a little bit. :) -Ez