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Twin Flames
9 chapters / 19496 words
Approximately about 2 hours to read
Description:
When Elizabeth Fell begins to have vivid dreams, she can’t help but wonder if they aren’t a part of her past life coming through in her subconscious. In these dreams she is always with a handsome blonde haired man who she cannot help but long for. She has no idea that they are soul mates, twin souls to be precise. A twin flame or soul is the ultimate soul mate, the one and only other half of one's soul, for which all souls are driven to find and join. But Elizabeth does not have that luxury; because the man of her dreams has rejected her and because of this she and he have become something much more than human. You see when you or your soul mate reject each other, your soul becomes so damaged that it has to create a clandestine body in order for it to survive. These are the fallen ones, rejected soul mates who wonder our planet, never realizing they are weighed down with wings of darkness covered in chains, and because of this she is blessed with speed, strength and the sight, to see the world for what it is – which explains why she has always felt so different in a world that no one else can see, but her. When she learns the truth of what she is, Elizabeth has no choice but to decide between living the same life over and over for a man who doesn’t want her, or to stop the cycle. While she is contemplating this, a terrifying man enters her life. He is the hunter of fallen ones, and he is hungry, very hungry for a broken soul. Could this could mean the end for the two of them altogether?
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Comments(24)
4 months ago Cait Cher said:
I read a few parts, and I thought they were good. I would have to say to keep the paragraphs closer together.
5 months ago Paige Johnson said:
I've read a very similar first few sentences so you should consider starting a different way. Comma after Instantly. I think your pace is a little fast given how little we know yet and the couple's love is a tad too sappy. Give them a dash of more history in the meanwhile. Ample amount of figurative language though, some pretty depictions of nature.
5 months ago Live, Laugh, Love said:
wow, that was really good. please continue. cliffy. ;)
5 months ago Live, Laugh, Love said:
I read the first 5 chapters. They are really good. what is the access code? I can't read from chapter 6 and on.
Reviews(5)
3 months ago BlackNether said:
Nice work! Not that it's new to me, I've read it before!
Good work, the idea is original in a way, and interesting in all ways.
You're very good at portraying emotions, I can feel them, burning, very real! But your punctuation needs work, I'd advise you to look through it and read it out loud, imagining how you want it to sound and putting in the appropriate punctuation! That's what I do.
I love your idea! This chapter doesn't have much action so it's a bit hard reading, but it was well written, good work!
about 1 year ago Crystal M. said:
Wow! This is superb. I loved this! I loved the first sentence in the preface. It was perfect for this. I didn't find any spelling or grammar errors. Amazing job!