The Centaur Chronicles

The Centaur Chronicles

12 chapters / 2791 words

Approximately 14 minutes to read

Genres:

Adventure, Fantasy, Novel

Comments(20)

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about 4 years ago Johanna Pascalnova said:

Care to swap? I will read your novel if you read mine. It's called The Interior Life. Mine is longer, but I write in-depth and thoughtful reviews. If you are interested, please let me know, and I will get right on this. My main character is male (and in first person) so insight from a guy would be especially helpful.

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almost 5 years ago A.G. Wade said:

Wow, this is really good so far! :) I suggest breaking up the paragraphs a bit, and having a little more dialogue. However, aside from that, this was a great piece to read! :D

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over 5 years ago Cait Cher said:

This has pretty good imagery. Some of it sounds gross, but who cares, right? Keep up the good work.

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over 5 years ago Crimson said:

PLZ tell me when you publish the last chapter!!!!

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over 5 years ago Sheri said:

my overall impression is that the description is good and this has potential. run it through spell check. cut up the big paragraphs into small, more focused pieces. the one thing that will make the biggest difference in this story, is to use dialogue to tell your story, which will eliminate the extra descriptions that are holding this back. definitely continue this, it's a great concept, with strong characters and told from a solid perspective. well done. this is good.

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over 5 years ago Sheri said:

love the first line. one suggestion, u used "face" twice in the first two sentences, which is distracting, change one.