Boys and Bees

Boys and Bees

23 chapters / 34206 words

Approximately about 3 hours to read

Description:

When Lorabeth decided to fall in love, she knew it wasn't going to be easy. Unlike the bees that she trained, boys were strange, unpredictable creatures. Since the most popular girl in school, Hedda, receives love letters on a weekly basis, Lorabeth thought that taking a peek at those letters would help... or perhaps not. Lorabeth and Hedda are united by a strange deadly fire and a swarm of encroaching predators that threaten the school of apiology. Will Lorabeth be able to find true love and save her school from these mysterious enemies? And what does a coat rack, yellow ribbon, hypnotist, and tapioca have to do with it?

Cover Art by Tim Walker

Genres:

Romance, Serial, Novel
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Comments(118)

Me 1963

over 1 year ago Linda D said:

A long tragic tear trickles down my face as I gaze longingly at absent friends, frozen in my imagination…If I wait any longer I may have to resort to the adverse practice of FanFiction and write my own ending.

Kim, don’t make me do that!

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over 2 years ago Anonymity said:

March...boo-hoo!

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over 2 years ago Annika Chauhan said:

Gack, it's another one: Chapter 8, Lorabeth has just 'finished' her homework and is going to bed. Moira turns the lights out. "The two lamps acted like twin stars amongst the shadows the room". I think it's supposed to be "shadows of the room" but I'm not sure exactly how you were trying to word it.

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over 2 years ago Annika Chauhan said:

Geesh! Typo: Chapter 3, fourth paragraph from the bottom of the part where Lorabeth sees Jenny and Paul together. You say "Lorabeth back away" instead of "Lorabeth backed away". Also, the paragraph right after that: "Springtime bloomed in summer." do you mean to say "Springtime bloomed into summer"? Not as sure of that one. I will tell you how brilliant I think this is when I've finished it!

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over 4 years ago Xavier Kent said:

Alright, I've finally gotten around to re-typing my review. I know this is a little late--sorry!

Anyways, as I was reading this (I read the first two chapters), as usual, I was amazed by your flawless descriptions, complex characters, and incredible/original plotline. I'm very intrigued by the whole daily letter-opening idea. This concept sort of lends a self-centered/snobbish facet to Hedda's character, but I'm not entirely convinced that she's bad yet.

Lorabeth is also an interesting character, and your descriptions of her only made the story more enjoyable. I also am in love with the idea of everyone having their own trained bee colony; it's SO original. I did find a mistake in the second chapter (Flight):

"The breeze picks up, making them sway as the float higher."--it should be 'they', not 'the'. Also, you changed the verb tense in this sentence which kind of threw me off a little bit. If you changed 'picks' to 'picked' that should clear it up.

Otherwise, I had no objections. I love this story and I'm very interested as to where it's going.

Me 1963

over 4 years ago Linda D said:

Your reviews seem to be lagging behind your comments. Yet most comments are really reviewing. So, go figure, eh? Glad you've added more. Just a few things that stuck out as...hmmm? Imagine that confused look that a puppy Beagle gives, cocking his head to one side and raising his ears to form a cute frown above those appealing eyes...well that's how I'd like to imagine that I look when I am confused by something you've written. My confused look probably doesn't look anything quite as cute...but I can imagine it does...Yes? Pg 22. “She was so hysterical that I could almost hear her through the receiver.” Almost? Perhaps the image you are trying to give us here is that Pedro’s father held the receiver away from his ear because it was so loud and Pedro could “almost” make out every word three rooms away (or other side of the house). But you may want to rephrase that one. It doesn’t seem in Lorabeth’s character to be rude to Pedro as to demand the tangerine.”Give it to me” “Hmm, I’m hungry,” she stated offhandedly.” A gentleman would share.” Taunting him. Or something would be more in line with her “teasing” nature that she uses with Pedro. Pg 23. You may want to clarify that Lorabeth doesn’t kiss boys behind the shed, otherwise it will be surmised that it is a common practice, like kickball or eating in the cafeteria, for all the student body except Hedda. And if Lorabeth plays kickball and eats in the cafeteria …well? Favourite line: “This curiosity rushed through her veins, almost as strong as when she discovered a new video on pollination or a study on worker bees” Almost – is what makes this so funny. Please know that I’m not criticizing. I truly love this story and the imagery that you buzz in my head (pun intended). It’s just that some lines (very few) give that Beagle confused feeling.