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Remember That Time
1 chapter / 149 words
Approximately less than a minute to read
Description:
Remember that time I wrote a poem about the love we shared? [Well, I do.]
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Comments(20)
about 1 month ago Liz Peterson said:
I really liked this poem! I found it relatable and I thought it was a great idea that each stanza was a different memory yet throughout the poem you hold one emotion: remembrance which was probably your goal. Excellent job! :)
about 1 year ago Daisy Dardon said:
aww awww awww I clicked the invisible AWW button!!! lol this is so cute!
over 1 year ago Weeping Willowz said:
Well, everyone else has summed up what I think. Simple, sweet and tangible. Beautiful.
over 1 year ago Chanel Marie McKinnon said:
This is too cute. It reminds me of the song "That Time" by Regina Spektor. I like this also because it's more a response, it's not a creation of something that wasn't there--it was there and it was tangible. I liked this.
Reviews(6)
over 1 year ago Krista O'Neill said:
As people at my school would say, "TOO CUTE!" I don't think I've seen a love poem handled quite so well by just a guy before. :) Well done. I only had one quibble with your wording -
"Remember that time
That you rescued a bird
And could never say goodbye?
[I helped you to.]"
If you say never, it means that the guy couldn't have possibly helped her to say goodbye, because, well, it was... never.
Otherwise, it's wonderful. So adorable.
over 1 year ago Chocoholic! said:
This made me smile. The things in parenthesis really added depth and feeling. I love the flow of this. My favorite paragraph was: "Remember that time We first meant to kiss When your parents interrupted? [We just kissed the next day.]"
I couldn’t help but smile at that. Amazing job.