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Approximately 29 minutes to read
Seventeen-year-old Cahira lived in a perfect world until Saffron Aureus came along and set fire to the snow.
Thanks to Ariana S. for the gorgeous cover!
7 months ago LeighAnn said:
I hope you continue because this is very interesting!
about 1 year ago Catherine Hale said:
This is a really good start. You should deffinently continue.
over 1 year ago Nicki Rose said:
I really liked this book! please write more! its fun to hear about what could happen to the us, as im in canada right now!
over 1 year ago Selena Collins said:
Wow. So much like Matched, Divergent, and so many other sci-fi future books I've read. I hope that I can see more of this to the end. :)
about 1 year ago Dayna Rix said:
I know you told me I only had to read the first chapter, but I couldn't stop there! I read the whole thing. it was heart-pounding, mysterious, and very, very good! please write more :)
over 1 year ago Georgia Atkin said:
Nice... it definitely looks promising so far! Your writing's fairly smooth, and the story is interesting. I like how it takes place in the future, but not too far ahead; there are recognizable details and names of places.
I do think that maybe you should draw out certain aspects a little more (i.e. tell readers about going to visit the ruins of Washington D.C., but don't tell them yet about WHY they are ruins.).
The end of chapter 5 felt a tad bit too dramatic to be believable. Make it feel more serious, maybe delve deeper into the issue or characters. It felt too sudden, and I think you could also show more of the relationship between Cahira and Tabrez. Why is he like family to her?