Rhiannon is The One Laughing

Rhiannon is The One Laughing

2 chapters / 262 words

Approximately 1 minute to read

Description:

Two of my poems (both written January 2012) I had as two seperate books that I put into one book. The poems are: "Rhiannon" and "I'm The One Laughing". I think "Rhiannon" is probably my best poem. It's also my first poem.

Genres:

Writing, Poetry

Comments(13)

Annika and naomi nov 2013 1966

about 2 years ago Annika Olives said:

~Swap for Troubled Truth~

I personally like Rhiannon better. It's definitely more powerful.

The second one didn't really feel like a poem to me. You had some long sentences and some short ones, which gave it sort of an awkward flow. It was almost like a story. You could cut back on the sentences a bit, make them have less syllables, and add some punctuation.

Keep writing!

~Annika

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over 2 years ago Em Kam said:

That was fun to read and extremely powerfuL! Awesome poetry.

Michae

over 2 years ago Emily Caly Cadence said:

Rhiannon is a super-cool poem :) Keep it up girlie!

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over 2 years ago â“‚TheHalf-Lightâ“‚ said:

Nice poem, interesting rhythm. KH

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