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Rhiannon is The One Laughing
2 chapters / 262 words
Approximately 1 minute to read
Description:
Two of my poems (both written January 2012) I had as two seperate books that I put into one book. The poems are: "Rhiannon" and "I'm The One Laughing". I think "Rhiannon" is probably my best poem. It's also my first poem.
Comments(14)
10 months ago Annika Olives said:
~Swap for Troubled Truth~
I personally like Rhiannon better. It's definitely more powerful.
The second one didn't really feel like a poem to me. You had some long sentences and some short ones, which gave it sort of an awkward flow. It was almost like a story. You could cut back on the sentences a bit, make them have less syllables, and add some punctuation.
Keep writing!
~Annika
11 months ago Em Kam said:
That was fun to read and extremely powerfuL! Awesome poetry.
about 1 year ago Emily Caly Cadence said:
Rhiannon is a super-cool poem :) Keep it up girlie!
about 1 year ago â“‚TheHalf-Lightâ“‚ said:
Nice poem, interesting rhythm. KH
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