Lust

Lust

1 chapter / 68 words

Approximately half a minute to read

Genres:

Writing, Poetry

Comments(15)

Marshmallow perfection

over 5 years ago Chocoholic! said:

Amazingly sweet poem. The flow and rhymes seemed effortless. keep writing

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about 6 years ago shreedhar acharya said:

well written!

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about 6 years ago Piero Morelli said:

I liked this poem very much. But I couldn't find its relation to the title. I feel that the poem is more about deep, true love, rather than passionate lust full of fire. Still, your poetry is beautiful and your words express tender love. Keep writing! Cheers, ~Piero.

P.S. I think you may like some of my work.

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over 6 years ago Jessie Carroll said:

I really liked that it wasn't overly long but it still got the point across. it was really pretty :) good job

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Lake - version 2

over 6 years ago Danie Grace said:

I really like this! But I agree with Julia, the first two lines don't seem to fit well. Everything else is smooth and rhythmic :)

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over 6 years ago Julia Joules said:

I really liked this, but I don't think the first two lines really fit the rest of the poem. Also, in the line "Traveling all time and land afar" you might want to switch 'land' to 'landing' or switch 'and' to 'to'