The Lost Beauty

The Lost Beauty

1 chapter / 1999 words

Approximately 10 minutes to read

Description:

I want to continue this so comments/hearts/reviews would be greatly appreciated.
Have you ever wanted to jump into the shoes of your favorite character, to be best friends with Katniss Everdeen or wield magic like Harry Potter? Joyce certainly has, and now she is in for the adventure of her life when she meets three fairies and an enchanted castle where storybook characters live.

Genres:

Writing, Fantasy, Romance

Comments(33)

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over 2 years ago Talya said:

This is really interesting! The only thing was I couldn't 'see' (if you know what I mean) most of the scenes and characters. Maybe try to describe things a little more?

Other than that, a few spelling/grammar mistakes, but those would be easy to make (like 'you're' instead of 'your') so it's not bad.

This was awesome, though!

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over 2 years ago Scribe said:

your intro has a great hook! questions always work!=)

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over 2 years ago Scribe said:

your intro has a great hook! questions always work!=)

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over 2 years ago Sam T said:

Well the Intro was amazing, and the rest of the story was good. Good jib and great discriptions as always

Reviews(4)

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over 2 years ago Polka-dot said:

This is an awesome idea for a book! You should keep writing it!!!! (It sounds like something I'd dream about in the best dream ever!!!!!)

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over 2 years ago Annabel G. said:

Thanks, Steel and Hajira for the reviews. They meant a lot and I took most of what you said from then and fixed some stuff. A lot of what Steel said had to do with the word count. :)