Hey! Wanna swap? I loved your story "Because We're Broken"! Could you read/heart "Just Keep Swimming" please? Feel free to read any of my other writings! Thanks so much! Spread the word.
This is alright so far, but I noticed several things as far as wording and such, throughout the first chapter. Just reading it through a couple more times should help you find and fix most of the issues though.
Also, exceprt, at the beginning, should be spelled excerpt. That's the only misspelling that I spotted though.
Wow, this was a very good way to introduce your character, your writing was very powerful. I could defiantly hear your character's voice. I really liked it, it's a very good piece.
There was a sentence that sort of confused me, other than what the mother said, so you may want to read through it. I'm pretty sure it was in the beginning. Sorry, I can't remember exactly what it was.
Anyway, very good! I hope that you add more soon! :)
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15 days ago Julia A said:
Hey! Wanna swap? I loved your story "Because We're Broken"! Could you read/heart "Just Keep Swimming" please? Feel free to read any of my other writings! Thanks so much! Spread the word.
7 months ago OurFinalFight said:
Powerful story, It was beautiful. Great job! :)
7 months ago Alexandria Serthes said:
This is alright so far, but I noticed several things as far as wording and such, throughout the first chapter. Just reading it through a couple more times should help you find and fix most of the issues though.
Also, exceprt, at the beginning, should be spelled excerpt. That's the only misspelling that I spotted though.
7 months ago Claira Marie said:
I loved reading this! You did an incredible job
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5 months ago Lilith Firefly said:
Wow, this was a very good way to introduce your character, your writing was very powerful. I could defiantly hear your character's voice. I really liked it, it's a very good piece.
There was a sentence that sort of confused me, other than what the mother said, so you may want to read through it. I'm pretty sure it was in the beginning. Sorry, I can't remember exactly what it was.
Anyway, very good! I hope that you add more soon! :)
about 1 year ago Decklan Ryker Concannon said:
I loved it! keep up the good work!