Throwing a pumpkin

Throwing a pumpkin

1 chapter / 98 words

Approximately half a minute to read

Description:

A knock at the door, but all there is is a pumpkin.

Genres:

Writing, Short Story

Comments(15)

Girl and teddy bear

over 5 years ago Akira said:

Okay, this is simply just awesome:) I really liked it, and it was very well written. I loved it:)

Girl and teddy bear

over 5 years ago Akira said:

Okay, this is simply just awesome:) I really liked it, and it was very well written. I loved it:)

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over 5 years ago Annika said:

I appreciated this especially because I could read it without having to open that freaking annoying window that you have to read stories in. So irritating. Gah.

Anyway. :) I love this. Pithy, witty, well written. It's a great train of thought. My one edit would be to remove the "brown" from "brown door" for no other reason than that it's unnecessary. All in all, I love this. Excellent job.

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over 5 years ago Fiderian said:

It was very short; which is cool but I feel like the words didn't pack enough of a punch to warrant it. (Here I go again... beating a horse dead...) If it doesn't matter what color the door is, don't say it! In such short writing EVERY WORD MUST COUNT. You don't need to say "mostly empty" apartment, just say empty. Unless there is some overwhelming need to have it that way.

Reviews(2)

Gedc1883

over 5 years ago Maddy Sanchez said:

Short and amusing. On your 8th sentence, I would a question mark after pumpkin and capitalize is. It sounds odd to me, ht eway the two sentences arte together. Other than that, good job.

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over 5 years ago David Wolivar said:

throw that pumpkin