about 1 year ago Deidre Fallow Project said:

The character you have created was amazing. He had flaws like any good character. I loved the picture you painted of that world. The beginning pulled me in and I could not stop reading until I have reached the end. This is simply wonderful.

over 1 year ago Marissa Salad said:

Very interesting. At first it felt rushed, and a bit disorganized, but it got much better. The tone is grim, and has an air of mystery to it, something I enjoyed very much. I really loved the ending, it didn't really conclude the story, but it certainly brought it to a close, which was just as good, maybe better, because it kept me thinking about your story. The only problem I feel needs to be addressed, is your tense. You have the tendency to switch between present and past, especially when your entire story is past. Watch out for that. Other than that, good job. I really enjoyed it.

Also, I'm really sorry it took me so long to get back to you on the swap. Sorry about that >///<