Never Stick Your Face in a Fan

Never Stick Your Face in a Fan

1 chapter / 1692 words

Approximately 8 minutes to read

Description:

A boy. His bully. Some sage advice. Read it.

Comments(8)

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about 5 years ago Miranda Noel Fedoronczuk said:

Very good concept...only suggestion i have is to maybe work on the dialogue.

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about 5 years ago Trina Elisabeth said:

Okay, this is amazing. Very ingenious idea, and lovely execution. :)

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about 5 years ago Enaw said:

I loved the story! The characters were great, I loved them all and the way the entire story just flowed. I loved it! (:

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about 5 years ago Azondrielle Kat said:

I loved your tension between Cory and Shawn. I also liked the way that Cory did the good thing, even though Shawn was so mean to him. your word choice is great and your details are perfect! Great job!

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over 5 years ago Katie ZaBAM said:

I knew I would love this piece as soon as I read the title! Fun, action-packed, and witty in all the right places. You have a fantastic writing style! You captured my attention immediately and never let it go, and I especially love the fact that the Dad's seemingly "useless" advice pulled through in the end! It's true, you should NEVER stick your face in a fan, especially one that's turned on. :P And the fact that there are no grammatical errors is a HUGE plus for me! All in all, a fantastic work. I'm so glad we swapped! Thanks for the enjoyable read. :]

~Katie

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over 5 years ago Iri said:

Ohmyword. I love this. It's so very...unorthodox. At any rate, great job. Just one thing to fix: When Shawn is insulting Cory in the first bit of the story, one of his names was, "diphthong", which I assume was meant to be spelled without the extra "h". Otherwise, brilliant. I love the idea of a bullied kid having to decide whether or not to save the bully. And the moment of the advice? Hysterical. It's so incredibly non-sage that it transforms that moment to absolute, laugh-out-loud hilarity. Keep up the good work! Sylvanie