just shine

just shine

1 chapter / 57 words

Approximately less than 20 seconds to read

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its my poem... That I wrote... Nothing special..

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Poetry

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over 5 years ago Lamar Smith said:

A very good poem. I really loved the last three lines of the first stanza. they really stuck out to me. I like the message in it and the brevity of the piece. Nice work!

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over 5 years ago Zombie Zoe said:

This is also great! People should know that they can do anything. But I noticed that you indented the first lines of your stanzas. I'm pretty sure you aren't supposed to do that, but I might be missing the point.

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over 5 years ago Halima said:

Very cute poem! I loved the simplicity of it. Although short and sweet it still sends out the message it conveys in a strong and emotional manor. Great work!

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over 5 years ago Trina Elisabeth said:

I loved this poem, and I'm not just saying that. The meaning behind your words is really fascinating, and I read it like three times to try to understand it. I love the line "waiting until the start of yesterday although today is an endless tomorrow." The end is also kind of awesome in how anticlimactic it is. Lovely.

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almost 4 years ago Ashley Nedu said:

I loved this poem, not only because I could understand it perfectly, but because I could connect with it as well. It made me feel like it was written for me, if that doesn't sound too silly.

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over 5 years ago Sabrina Anne said:

This was a beautiful piece of work. I loved it. The lines flowed very smoothly, and you had excellent word choices. And besides all of that, it had a good message. Purely phenomenal. Hearted and followed!