When The Sun Set's

When The Sun Set's

1 chapter / 705 words

Approximately 4 minutes to read

Description:

Pretty Pretty please read this. If you are going to you are an awesomely awesome person! ^_^

Tags:

Comments(26)

Beautifully maiden

over 4 years ago Aria Mustachio said:

Thanks for reading. I'll use spell check later to fix the errrors

Fullsizerender (2)

over 4 years ago Lena Mars said:

You have a great idea started here. The first chapter was a little confusing, seemed slightly rushed, and was filled with grammatical errors, but all of that can be fixed easily. I'm sort of a nerd when it comes to grammar, so of course I would notice that. :) I really love the story you have going, and I really hope you continue this idea. Keep up the amazing writing!

~Lena

Beautifully maiden

over 4 years ago Aria Mustachio said:

thanks the second chapter is really hard to figure out though

Fb_saki

over 4 years ago Kayla said:

Loved the story, but capitalized your 'I's! Also some of your dialogue felt stiff, I recommend reading it out loud and where it feels awkward to say is where you should change it.

Reviews(6)

Beautifully maiden

over 5 years ago Aria Mustachio said:

yahhhh thanks

974717_10204180347220621_815195692_n - copy

over 5 years ago Erica Bouban said:

ohmy, this is fantastic. i really like the direction you're taking this in and i'm really excited. i wanna know what happened to her boyfriend. but i'm really excited(: great jobb.