Running Away

Running Away

1 chapter / 1134 words

Approximately 6 minutes to read

Description:

This is for the Pushing The Limits contest. Please read! And yes, I will expand after the contest. Hope you like it!~~~Princess Ray is about to be married and become queen of the kingdom when the boy she fell in love with years ago appears at her bedside. For so long, she has forgotten about him, and the love they shared, and their past, and now, she can no longer deny that she stills loves him. But when her kingdom needs a new ruler, and expects her to be married by the end of summer, will she follow the boy as she did so long ago, or will she stay true to her people and her kingdom?

Genres:

Writing, Fantasy, Romance

Comments(13)

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over 3 years ago George Bailey said:

I love I cant wait to read more

Santacruzme

almost 5 years ago Trina Elisabeth said:

I really love the dynamic between your characters, even in such a short piece. It's clear how she feels about him, and the hurt in his voice made it obvious he loves her just as much. Just that he got into the castle shows that. It was really a touching story, and I'm glad you're continuing it after the contest! :)

Emmaprincess2

almost 5 years ago TeenQueen said:

This is a nice, original story. I really would like to know when you would update this? Your writing style is great.

Queenie

Imperfection

about 5 years ago Lindsey Didier said:

I can't wait until you continue this! I really want to read more and to find out the whole story behind Xander and Ray. It will be great, I'm sure.

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about 5 years ago Christina Thurrow said:

My heart is pounding. What happens next? In fact, what happened before all this? And what is her actual name if ‘Ray’ is just a nickname? Aah! Write more! :) I noticed two typos though: ~ “ shouldn’t of come” should be “shouldn’t have come” ~ “guards will come to and possibly catch me” …What did he just say??? Great job! You have amazing skills. Good luck! Would you mind reading my entry for the same contest? It’s called “Sylvia?” Thanks! :)

Inspiring1

about 5 years ago Thea said:

I really, really like this! My only suggestion would be that you seemed to use a lot of adverbs--e.g. slyly, quietly. Adverbs are best avoided in writing. For example, instead of writing "he said slyly" which sounds a bit odd with the two ly's, I would suggest "he said with a sly tone to his voice." or, "he said with a cocky grin on his face." Just a suggestion! :) Your writing is beautiful. You should write more!